I think an advanceship vs sapphirepearlship story would make a good one. It puts a new twist on the usual advanceship stories.

Awwww! theyre falling in love and they dont even know it yet! :,D haha

The idea you've had is a bit strange but i think it would make a good story.

Ash, you fool. You should have just left her there... she had a better chance of learning her lesson staying inside that cell overnight with that hairy bloke... you're way too nice Ketchum

But yeah, the other reviews suggest that Norman is the thief. I doubt it just because it would be too perfect that May finally gets a bit of karma in the form of her own dad... but I reckon that the guy has some sort of connection to Norman to see if May had finally let go of her past.

But yeah, nice chapter mate. Glad that you have some time to write again :)

This is so good! Pretty much one of the most amazing writers on this website. So happy your helping me with my own :3

The moment Ash Ketchum stepped in, May's life was destined to change :D
Go Ashy boy!

A lesbian Dawn you say? Hmm thats an interesting thought. Other then that, May is shaping into someone I'm liking a fair bit.

WOW so ironic, but I guess what goes around comes around. Oh snap, is the thief Norman? That would make the situation more tense. Drew got introduced and just like the anime he sure can be a dick. The scene where May stole his ribbon had me cracking up. Like this story couldn't get any better, great chapter and I can't wait for the next

Oh, the irony! Stupid Drew...

Omg they hugged. ;) Nah this is a really unique idea and I'm highly enjoying. Goodwork as always Shiny.

May... You are really messing up. C'mon you'll be better than drew soon! SO DON'T STEAL YOU CAN HUG ASH WITHOUT STEALING OKAY?! And Ash... He's so sweet :3 and the whole fanny pack thief thing intrigues me... Anyway good job as always!

It was sssooooooo short 8(... I still like it, so when is there bond going to strengthen

Yet another cliff hanger… O_o. Wow that was a really in doth personal chapter. It was full of detail and everything a good story needs. Hope the writing is going well for you. Yes. The story is still gengarish xD.

Nice chapter. And, unless it's Norman, this guy doesn't stand a chance against May.

"Will this villainess thief be able to get away?"*cough*Norman*cough* other than that nice dose of Irony at the end, and I think May should of gotten away with stealing the ribbon :/, good one gengar :)