|Reviews for Life Lessons|
| Brackenfern 2/9/13 . chapter 5
Cool idea for the RTI.
| Guest 2/6/13 . chapter 5
Ideas? Hmmm... Oh, oh! I know! Yassen!
| Albany 2/6/13 . chapter 5
Your story is very well up here it's time to put action and excitement.
Alex has to spend 15 days training at that time could improve relations with the unit k when everything gets better, they call for a mission in Central America and the unit does not know anything.
After several days, Alex is M.I.A. and unity begins to worry about his disappearance and organizes a rescue with the help of Smithers and Mrs. Jones, (in between parts of anguish of Jack, Tom, and of torture, as Alex achievement and valuable information hidden before be captured by these terrorists.
Not to give you another idea, that if you do not kill Alex or his unit.
| gamerdude19 12/19/12 . chapter 5
love it sorry i dont have any ideas except make it longer
| TantalumCobolt 12/20/12 . chapter 5
I'm guessing that whatever just happened was supposed to be RTI? Was it supposed to end before we found out the guys name? If not, maybe editing would be a good idea, if so, you have to write the next chapter soon because I'm really curious as to who the man is. I can't think of many ideas, but maybe K-unit finding out about the bullet wound, or somebody else finding out and telling K-unit. Poor Alex, I can just imagine Snake's reaction! Maybe somebody from MI5 could come and try to recruit Alex, that would prove interesting. I dunno, if you are going to use one of my ideas though could you let me know? I can't wait to see what you decide to do for the next chapter!
| LarkaTheWhiteWolf 12/19/12 . chapter 4
... I hate how FanFiction has a rule that you can't review twice on the same chapter.
So... in response to chapter 5, the beginning is really good. It's intriguing, honestly. What exactly were you planning on having happening in this story? (You had to have had some idea, right?)
The unknown man could be the head of CIA, FBI, MI6, MI5, ASIS, or any other organization you can think of. They could, perhaps, be wanting to recruit Alex.
Or, perhaps he could be someone pretending to be the head of some organization who actually wants to kill Alex.
Maybe the unknown man is just an agent of the CIA, FBI, MI6, MI5, or ASIS.
Or maybe he's neither. Perhaps he's the sergeant's boss and wants to promote Alex to a higher rank.
-Shrugs.- It's up to you.
| LarkaTheWhiteWolf 12/19/12 . chapter 5
So... I read your Author's Note about the grammar help stuff.
And what irks me most is people giving bad advice on grammar.
I'm sorry, guys, but either correct everything, or nothing.
In response to:
" "I talked to Blunt about your situation" the sergeant started with disgust
'the' should be capitalized because it's at the beginning of a sentence. There should be a period after 'disgust'. "
The "the" should NOT be capitalized, as it is NOT at the beginning of a sentence. It should be: "I talked to Blunt about your situation(comma)" the sergeant started with disgust.
Commas are always in quotes if followed by a he/she/it said. A period is used if it is NOT followed by a he/she/it said. And a question mark or exclamation point is used if it's a question or exclamation no matter if followed by a he/she/it said.
In response to:
"You awake cub"- "You awake Cub?"
It's: "You awake(comma) Cub?" You use a comma if you're going to address someone.
Grammar isn't all about capitalization and periods. Learn it, before you attempt to correct someone on it.
| Ty Cavanaugh 12/3/12 . chapter 4
i really like it! but longer chapters would be nice... :)
| Empty Thoughts 12/2/12 . chapter 3
I think the story is good... Except for the grammar.
"I talked to Blunt about your situation" the sergeant started with disgust
'the' should be capitalized because it's at the beginning of a sentence. There should be a period after 'disgust'.
"cub will be here for a few weeks".
Cub is a name, and therefore, should be capitalized. The period should be inside the quotation marks.
He then turned to Alex and began to address him and only him "you will live, eat and train with K Unit while you are here and like I said before THIS IS NOT BOY SCOUTS" he roared the last part to emphasise it.
The sentence doesn't really flow well, or at least, I don't think so. I think it would be better if it was "He then turned to Alex and addressed him." Anyway, there should be some for of punctuation after 'him'. After 'scouts' there should be a period. He should be capitalized because it's at the beginning of a sentence. You spelled emphasis wrong, by the way.
There's mistakes like this all though the story, and I highly-to the highest degree- encourage you to get a beta.
| UnknownLep13 12/2/12 . chapter 4
Coolio! I really like the premise for this story! You could probably do with checking over your work a bit more for run-on sentences, capitalization errors, and spelling mistakes though. But still! :) I like it!
| LetPastBePast 12/2/12 . chapter 4
I like the story so far... but I think it's (the story) moving a little fast. but it has a lot of potential, also make the chapters a little longer. :)
| LetPastBePast 11/28/12 . chapter 3
you can't stop there, where is the rest! need chapter 4...
| SpellCheck 11/26/12 . chapter 2
"You awake cub"- "You awake Cub?"
a few new scares- a few new scars
jagged scare- jagged scar
its going to get realy interessting- it's going to get really interesting
Hey! I really like this plot line, you could use a beta though... You should probably elaborate a little on why he's going to BB, you might be planning on doing that, what do I know?
Anyways, like I was saying, if you go back and correct all the little mistakes in there, this will be a great story! I love your style of writing and the details put into this chapter!
| bsms123 11/27/12 . chapter 3
really like the way the story is going, its quite witty.
I personally think the chapters could be a little longer.
overall I think its a great story and looking forward to your next update.
| Peanut Butter Rules 11/25/12 . chapter 2