You know, most of the time story's are longer than a couple of paragraphs, and actually have a plot that makes sense behind them. Also, I'm not sure if you know this, but DNA does not work like that. A rather pathetic character profile inside of the story makes the whole thing seem sloppier than it already is. It's really silly to even think that this could be called a 'good story', if anything it's a sad excuse for a self-insert.

My dear, will you please continue? Or is the story perhaps up for adoption. It is a good story with a great plot.

THIS IS REALLY GOOD ! PLEASE WRITE MORE!