No offence but I think oyu should check your capitals...

Epic! Amazing for a first time! :-D

this story is awesome! please continue

Chat format isn't allowed in fanfiction. Please remove this as soon as possible.
And please put proper capitalization.
Also, can't you AT LEAST write Kane Chronicles correctly?

Hurry want to find out;)

Hi, there. Please consider it as reminder. Your fic is written in chat/script format and it breaks the rules of FFNet. I believe that you've received the warning as well as solutions via PM by our member.

Please, fix it unless you want your fic reported.

Sincerely
Grey
-Eliminator

Hello. :)

Um, this story can actually be reported. :/ You are not allowed to write in script format. Your grammar is terrible, even through chat the characters are OOC! Please use proper English. :/

If I were you, either delete this or edit this into a decent fic. Thank you.

Good luck.

-Kaye Nightshade

You know this is kinda a cool idea, i mean the chatting, but sooner or later you are going to have to take our story somewhere, like school or egypt or something to do with the house of life. Still great story and keep going.

what is a skyping contest?

Har har har. Nw all it needs are Isis and Horus arguing.

Your fic is under violation. For reference, here are the rules.

Entries not allowed:
Non-stories: lists, bloopers, polls, previews, challenges, author notes, and etc.
One or two liners.
MST: comments inserted in between the flow of a copied story.
Stories with non-historical and non-fictional characters: actors, musicians, and etc.
Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc.
Chat/script format and keyboard dialogue based entries.

Your fic is in script/chat format. Also, please improve the grammar.

I suggest you either edit, or upload on a website that allows chat format.

Instead of [zia: hi], you could say ["Hi," Zia said.].

Failure to edit or delete will result in a report.

explodinghead
Member of Eliminator

No, just no.

Funny

Who is 'big head'?