| Reviews for The Bow and the Gun |
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subsider34 6/7/13 . chapter 6I have to say that this story is so much better than Fifty Shades of Overkill. There's none of that depressing dystopian vibe, the characters are absolutely awesome, and the plot is nicely done. Anyways, you need to update this awesome fanfic! Its one of the best out there! |
Guest 5/27/13 . chapter 6 You left out why the stormtroopers are after them |
Anonymus 5/26/13 . chapter 6 Clever ending. Destroyin the Corellian ship, and flyin with the Prowler away. at least thats what I think what happened. o: I still like you ;D |
Anonymus 5/26/13 . chapter 5 I dont want to sound racist... but why are there sooo many Japanese/Chinese/korean/whatever words? YU NO SPEAK AMERICANOO ! SILL: I FU*** WUV YOU ! |
Anonymus 5/26/13 . chapter 4 did you use german on purpose, or are you German and dont know the proper terms on English? Corrections would be: altertümlich altertümliche (the sentence would mean on German: "Ich denke/ erwarte,dass die altertümliche Stone Angel (deswegen aus dem Dienst genommen wird)/dekomissioniert wird." ; verdammt verdammten. "Gib die Schuld ONI, und deren verdammten Budget" (these Adjectives end mostly with an "E" in singular (1 thing) and es in plural (2/ 2). If talking about persons: masculine Ending is an "er" (verdammter/ schlauer / deutscher...) femminine ends on "e" again (hübsche / hässliche / deutsche... [jea ran out of examples]) neutrum ends with "es" (kaltes / heißes / schönes / deutsches )) if you want to learn proper German grammar, take lessons. (or if you already take them, keep attending them. [I know that German is hard to learn, and most people will think of you as a Nazi for speaking it... but anyway I dont wven know why I'm still writing this. I might as well just tell you, that exept a few grammar errors your story seems great.]) Exept a few grammar errors your story seems great. Q:do all these things: "()" close themselfes again ? |
Anonymus 5/26/13 . chapter 1 -dat summary... w. t. f. -"and the others with the MA5D ICWS, better known as the Assault Rifle" don't you mean, that they ARE Assault Rifles ? -"The icing on the cake, though, was an energy sword she managed to fit into the palm." why. would. a. Scientist. need. an. Energy sword . IN HER PALM ? (I can see, that this is going to play an important role in later chapters, but... seriously?) -"Bond had chosen to represent himself as an old legendary spy from Earth, James Bond." AAWWWW YEEAAA!. wait. which Bond is he ? :o I wuv it so far. have three snowflakes *** |
Guest 5/26/13 . chapter 6 I would have the unsc remove their emblem on the ship the the donate and put the rebellion one |
Guest 5/12/13 . chapter 6 Man I love it keep going |
Lay Down Hunter 5/3/13 . chapter 2Very slim my ass xD |
gizago 4/25/13 . chapter 6Great story, when can we see the next update? |
guest 4/21/13 . chapter 6 kalom,the difference between the unsc and the empire is that the the unsc is responsible for defending earth and her colonies that are governed by the ueg which is the governing body of all wolds in unsc space while the empire is ruled by an autocratic,totalitarian dictator which the unsc would disapprove of, and the worlds within the empire are ruled by moffs which are appointed by the emperor and are under the jack boot of the imperial military. although the insurrectionists and the rebel alliance have a similarity in that they oppose a central government here is the big difference the innies use terrorist tactics to get what they want even if it means using nuclear weapons on civilians which the rebel alliance would frown upon and they fighting to rid the galaxy of paplatine and his tyrannical regime and restore the republic which the unsc would support because they would have another Adolf Hitler on their hands and they would consider all the power in the hands of one man to be too dangerous. |
cementCANOE 4/17/13 . chapter 2I can't imagine that the star wars peoples just went into space with fully functional laser weaponry. They must have used projectiles at some point, even on their ships. Maybe since it has been so long since they used mass drivers and other ship based projectile weaponry, they have focused on stoping only the energy weapons that are so prevalent in the starwars universe. However, the PLANS for those older shields that would stop projectiles are still floating around in an archive somewhere, and since galactic civilization has been around for so long it would take a very long time to find them. But they are findable. Just an idea. I am enjoying the story so far. |
oldtimeydude 4/10/13 . chapter 6Seems interesting, I'm thinking it was a bit quick of them to go around and jump the gun with extending relations with the Alliance. I'd be looking at both sides, particularly the Empire since it was their ship they captured along with their information. Perhaps setting up tentative communications with both sides perhaps? |
Officer Hot-Pants 4/9/13 . chapter 2I'm pretty sure it's canon that storm troopers are all clones. |
Guest 4/8/13 . chapter 3 unsc VS the empire, UNSC WINS |