|Reviews for The Fall and Rise|
| Ecomadness 5/20/13 . chapter 8
Loved tgis chap can't wait for more update soon.
| coincidencless 5/19/13 . chapter 8
Lovely chapter, as always! Wonder how Riley and Co. are gonna deal with a returned Mother.
*pets jacket* I think I'll call you... codename Europa, one of the mythological women in Zeus's lives :-)
*gets strangled by Europa*
| Whitelight 2/9/13 . chapter 7
hey this one is good,keep it up why no update?Sorry for bad english
| scout360pyro 1/19/13 . chapter 3
i like this story, thats all i have to say
| scout360pyro 1/19/13 . chapter 1
well i just want to say, that while the game prototype 2 sucks, they did explain why they went the way they did. Alex was at the peak, at the height. A new game could not be made that could conceivably have him weakened the way he was at the beginning. They basically realized too late that they had painted themselves into a corner. Oh well... dumbasses should have made more effort and looked at the fanfiction for ideas I guess...
| Guest 12/28/12 . chapter 7
Another good chapter. I wonder how this "mind game" is going to end. And after the mind fight with Redlight, Alex Mercer will maybe become even stronger?
I'm really curious about how where you are going with this story. I mean even if Alex rescue Dana, the threat of Redlight is still out there. And if Alex step in to control Redlight? well... good for him, but power causes corruption, right? Looking forward for more development.
p.s. You probably want to delete the review that I double posted (actually, triple...)
I am still not used to the review system of . And I posted one review at 12/24, it did not come out when nest day I check, so I posted it again, then the next day...And today, I saw there were three post...Sorry...
| Ecomadness 12/29/12 . chapter 7
Just discoverd this story its awesome can't wait for more keep up the good work.
| coincidencless 12/28/12 . chapter 7
Lovely chapter yet again, wonder what's going to happen to Dana if/when she's freed from Redlight's mind control thingy. And poor Pariah - Bloodtox AND electricity, a Prototype's two worst enemies. Loved your little holiday special at the end. Oh man, Alex would do that to Pariah.
Eager to see more, this is getting interesting!
| Guest 12/26/12 . chapter 6
I like your story. It's very interesting, and better written than many stories around here, at least that's what I think. With good background knowledge of Prototype, instead of trying to degrade Alex Mercer's ability, you write the story in another aspect, the psychological one.
About Silent Hill part. I know the game, and had watched some walkthrough, the stories are rather good, but never have played it. It's just not my type of game. If I'm going to play it, I'll probably try to kill everything... That's said, I prefer "strong" character. And I think Alex Mercer is just powerful enough. Looking forward to see him kick some ass (again).
Besides, there are enough plots that is going on to keep me interested. Your explanations about Pariah and Redlight are also intriguing.
| coincidencless 12/17/12 . chapter 6
Haha, lovely brain troll! Pretty sure you knew this, but Cross was glowing white because by then the Supreme Hunter had already nommed him. And I loved your argument between P1 and P2. Or, to be specific, Mr. Mercer and EVERYONE ELSE. All I can say for your debunking of P2 is "You tell it!". I agree 150%.
Those nightmares/mindscape of chasing Dana through Redlight's thoughts are creepy. You imply you got inspiration for that from Silent Hill? Never played it, so meh. I love your interpretation of the Greene fight. Though for me it was more of hitting the main body with Critical Pain, it bouncing off, and me going 'HOW THE HELL DO I HURT THIS THING?'. Curious to see what the next 'level' of Redlight's mind will be. And a little thing about saying Dana's not the antagonist and all that - don't give that shit away :-). At least let us have some surprises.
If you want, I'd be more than happy to beta for you, for the grammar mistakes and such. Just send me a PM and we can discuss more there.
| coincidencless 12/11/12 . chapter 5
Very nice story, and I... well, this is pretty much the ONLY reason I would every like Alex causing an outbreak; to stop another, worse outbreak. NO other reason is acceptable, Activision! YOU HEAR ME? *shakes fist at the sky*
I liked your description of Pariah, but one thing about your A/N about why he's heavy, but not as heavy as Alex, and so on; all that should be explained in the story itself. It's ok to explain them in the Author's Note, but it's better to explain it in the story. Just little tidbits like Alex wondering 'Where does the chocolate bar he's eating go? Does it go anywhere?'. That kinda stuff.
Still, this will be very intriguing to see develop. I see a sibling war between Alex and Redlight!Dana coming up, and I both fear and anticipate it.
| coincidencless 12/7/12 . chapter 4
Cheesy? No, I think it's sweet. Don't worry, your writing's good, just the grammar could use some work. Also, you could break up some of the larger paragraphs, like the ones in Dana's nightmares, which were painful to read from their size. Speaking of her nightmares...
GREENE YOU SCARY!
| Laluzi 12/7/12 . chapter 4
Oh god, this is so sweet and sad. Human Alex and Dana's relationship splintering, Alex's race against time to save his sister... I can't wait to see where it goes.
'Before that moment, he'd been happily killing anyone and destroying everything, everything. He'd told himself repeatedly before that he was supposed to do these things, the killings, the destroying, all in the name of hunting…the answers and the guilty, and that it's right... I can feel it. He realized later it was because his viral nature that made him this way. But the feeling was nothing compared to that moment when she had acceptance in her eyes, and the words… Look, no matter what, you're still my brother. If she could accept a brother who killed, who holds voices in him, who… consumes, maybe… just maybe she could accept that he's a sentient virus who cared for her… and not that monster of a brother.'
This paragraph was just beautiful.
| Laluzi 12/4/12 . chapter 3
Ooh, I'm surprised I didn't find this story sooner. There are places where your writing is a little choppy, I confess, but you're doing an excellent job characterizing Alex, and this looks very promising. A spot of hope in this choked section, you could say.
| coincidencless 12/4/12 . chapter 3
Very nice, but I really hope you don't have Alex become evil. That would make me :-(