I love you for writing this. It was so good even though Naomi in part 1 made me cringe and want to kill her. I like how you made their gradual maturity seem so real. The game scene where Emily walked towards Naomi was perfection. Again, amazing job. I look forward to reading more of your work.

you have very long chapters but they're great.. finally finished reading this :) yay! its been a beautiful story! no kidding it took them forever to get together but in the end we all know there's a happy ending. thanks for finishing this, it rashly says a lot about you..you're an amazing person with huge potential

What a flip flop of emotions throughout! If this is part two, then I know part three will be spectacular. ::eagerly hops over to read the next installment::

Wow. Fucking wow. Normally i wait to review until the end but i had to say that part one has me terribly broken up. Youre a very skilled writer and have captured naomi and emilys voices well. I must say a lot of naomis behavior with micah seemed different from the original character but everything with emily felt very real. I am so excited to see how this concludes, excellent work!

Great far

... I cry ! Like really cry when they broke up -'
haha :D I love your story :)

I don't get why Naomi was hooked to Micaela in the first place. It was never revealed in full detail but I guess it doesn't matter as she's not that important :p Naomily will prevail. I just hate that she has this hold on Naomi. And JJ is right, she's basically abusing Naomi.

The break off was anti-climatic but a relief nonetheless.

Thanks for the story :)

Totally heart the friendship between the 3 musketeers and D'art (brill way of coming up with their nicks btw). I can't tell you how much I love AU. Naomi's description of the library, the feel of the books, everything... makes me miss the old days... Giggling and shaking my head when Emily asked Naomi out and Naomi freaking out. I wouldn't mind the cliche of them having falling for each other at first sight if this is the kind of AU you're writing. What is the word for this whole meeting...uhm...adorable! Yep, very adorable. All hearts and coos and all that lol. Micah sounds handful and she hasn't made appearance yet but I have faith in Emily to push through!

Ops, just noticed this was already completed. So sorry, didn't find it sooner!

Many thanks!

such a nice story one of my favorite must say..hope u write another one

"You... you instantly wanted to date me and that scared you" she says instead.
and i felt like an explosion just went off in my stomach!
best chapter ever :) u r good!

i cant believe u made me feel sad for them and i wanted them to be together...and i am a big naomily fan lol

in this part 3 naomi better run and run and run after emily!and better know she wants!
as understand i love your story and will read it all today :)

This was lovely.

Amazing chapter

Thank you. This is the most honest, gut-wrenching, brilliant, beautiful story I've read in years. Hands down. I literally read the entire story until my eyes were watering and going cross, had to go to bed, got up and continued reading it. I didn't study, I didn't write my paper, I didn't care, I was that engrossed. This story was painful at times, but in the most perfect way. In the way that put you there, that made you feel all the confusion, near misses and utter frustration and then, finally, the sweet, heart bursting happiness when those two kids finally got it together. You have a talent, the way you have been able to lead these two on this journey, make us feel every misstep and cringe, feel every small victory and cheer. I found myself wanting more when it was over but truly satisfied with the ending. And what an ending it was, it was just as perfectly paced as the rest of the story, it wasn't rushed or overly fluffy, it truly is amazing the balance you kept. I know you said this would probably be your only story but I truly, sincerely hope not. You are too gifted of a writer to not share it with the world. Also, I commend you for sticking to the story you wanted to tell, the way you wanted to tell it and never giving in to readers pressure, that's what choose your own adventure books are for ;-)

So, yeah, thanks again for sharing, though that doesn't even scratch the surface of how much I loved this story of yours and the way you told it.