| Reviews for The Unbreakable Bond |
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Wolflover235 5/7/13 . chapter 8Well. They finally met. Kinda. I wonder how they will handle it. Update soon! |
Wolflover235 4/13/13 . chapter 7Ssssoooooo. Is Darren a wolf? And is he going to reunite with Mr Crepsley? Update soon ! |
guest 3/31/13 . chapter 1 LOVE this! I also love the father son bond between darren and crepsley! Too cute! |
Wolflover235 3/25/13 . chapter 6Wow. It's kind of strange having the wolves pov like that. I hope they are nice enough to let Darren return with Larten. Well. Update soon. I liked this. |
Wolflover235 3/22/13 . chapter 5Wow. This is getting weirder and weirder. Who's trying to kill him now? Haha. Update soon! |
Wolflover235 2/14/13 . chapter 3Awwwww. This almost made me want to cry! This isn't the end right? Please don't let it be the end! I mean! Who was the boy who saved Darren? Who was the guy that tortured him? Oh please update soon if this isn't the end! |
nightmre13 2/7/13 . chapter 2I love this fanfic hope you post new chapters soon |
AgentOhioS118 1/20/13 . chapter 4It was good, but I'm so lost with this ending... Where'd Oya come from? Why is Darren calling Larten "dad" and Arra "mom" Why is Oya calling Arra "mom"? I don't get why all of them are suddenly related to Darren. I really hope you can help me here because I was pretty confused. |
AgentOhioS118 1/20/13 . chapter 1I like the plot for it so far. It's certainly got me hooked :) I only have a few pointers: 1) You may want to watch out for periods and commas. They can be very useful in writing. They help tie together sentences and separate things. (LOL I couldn't think of a way to word that) 2) Some things did confuse me. Not the overall plot. But the way things were worded. I had to make little changes in my head for it to make sense to me. 3) I am a little confused as to why Darren is calling Larten "dad". Hoping that clears up in the chapters to come. And finally: 4) (This is just a little tip like thing) If you are having trouble with grammar or spelling or making sure it flows, look into a beta here on Fanfiction, or get a good friend to read over it that you know won't bash on your writing :) And don't feel offended on that last one because in the beginning of my adventure as a writer I had a hard time with making sure it sounded that the spelling and grammar was legit. I had to force myself to look at the story as "spelling, grammar, and flow" instead of "fun time." In the end my writing has improved (with much help from friends). And if you can't find anyone who is willing, and you don't want to ask a beta on here, I'm willing to give you my e-mail and you can e-mail em too me and I can read over them and correct them as I go, if you wish :) Can't wait to read the next and I hope to read more of your work soon! -Agent Ohio |
Guest 1/12/13 . chapter 4 Awww cute yet weird ending is Darren 12 or 6 cause that how he sounds ,he sounds cute so does oya x3 |
Wolflover235 1/11/13 . chapter 4Wow. That was good! Darren and Larten so close! I did love this! ;) |
Wolflover235 1/6/13 . chapter 2 Hey. Don't feel like logging in. On vacation. But I want to get caught up with my updaters! I loved this chapter. I wonder how the vampire princes will deal with this...? Update soon! ;) |
Guest 12/27/12 . chapter 1 Aww so cute Darren is like a eight year old thought as I recall he became vampire at age 12 in the book .movie. Version sucks big time I like it when the protagonist is at a young age teenagers are to moody for me and I'm 18 .loved the story in all I hope you write a conclusion of it soon that would be awesome :D |
AwesomeRedVampire 12/9/12 . chapter 1This is a very cute story. It's hard to find stories where Darren and Larten are father and son, but if there's one down side to this story it's that you need to work on your grammar a little bit. You left some words out or you put to many in and that takes away from the story because you focus on what is or is not there. You also need to fix some punctuation too. I'm sorry if this is too much all at once. |
Wolflover235 12/4/12 . chapter 1I love this chapter. Or chapters. Maybe you can split them up. And. Please continue this! I love your version of writing this! It's exactly how I imagine well. Can't wait for an update. :) |