|Reviews for Rebellion in Paradise|
| Epic Laughter 5/1/13 . chapter 12
HAVE I EVER MENTIONED HOW GOOD YOU ARE AT BUILDING SUSPENSE AND CLIMACTIC SCENES
I couldn't have picked a better writing partner for Gregory Despair Show! ;)
On that note, my heart started pounding when Captain got thrown in the Cannonata! I'm so glad you didn't forget that plot point! Not that I thought you would ;) You really are a great writer!
The tensions and the action and the amazing pace... you, ma'am, are THE QUEEN OF PACING. Not really an impressive sounding title, but it's impressive to me!
Can't wait for the rest!
| Tiigerliily 4/30/13 . chapter 12
Ah, Captain is back! :D I really love his character, and something tells me he'd get along well with Bart, too! :D
It's pretty darn sinister inside the Canoñata, isn't it? :O Not that you can expect differently from a place where Pester's Ruffian's dwell! :P
Kora feeling so much for Bear is so cute! I'm glad she manages to ease him eventually... Crushes really can make the most tense situations seem normal and the most normal situations seem tense, hehe! :D
I like how you incorporated Bart's super powers in this small battle. The final confrontation is bound to be even more epic though, I'm sure! :D Keep up the great work! :D
| Tiigerliily 4/30/13 . chapter 11
Nice chapter! I like the role you gave Langston in this one... Pester actually seems kind of fond of him, for listening to his suggestions! Setting traps and stuff is very in-character for him, too! :P
I love how you write Gretchen! Such a natural leader. I like Kora and her remarks even more, though - I'm glad we're seeing a bit more of her cynical side now! :D
Your writing is very realistic, too! Describing how their faces feel under their mask is not something I'd think of fast, myself! :D
| Epic Laughter 4/25/13 . chapter 11
AHHHH, how cute was this chapter? It was a lovely palate cleanser after the sheer intensity of the last chapter, hehe! (not that intensity is a bad thing! ;) ) Gretchen and Bart's reunion actually warmed my heart, and Bear and Kora's little moment was TOO CUTE. Uuuugh, OTP, seriously!
Also, can I just say you made Langston's crush on Leafos awful cute. Still creepy, yes, but way cuter than most people portray it! Poor Leafos. Poor, poor Leafos. Still, the mental image of her giving him a hug is adorable ;w;
AWESOME work; I can't wait for more!
| Epic Laughter 4/15/13 . chapter 10
OH MY GDO THIS WAS SO INTENSE AND AMAZING ALKSJSAFASDASF!
okay now that that's out of the way
WOW, what a chapter! God, you are such an amazing writer! The plot is flowing at a steady pace, and the excitement of this chapter actually made my heart pound! I dream of having that effect on my readers one day! You are one impressive girl, Ven, keep up the amazing work! I can't wait to read more!
| Tiigerliily 4/14/13 . chapter 10
Amazing, amazing, amazing! :D This gotta be my favorite chapter of yours, so far! There's so much going on here (the Sour attack, Leafos mentioning the unfortunate history concerning her father's old garden, Dastardos wanting to spare his sister), it gives off a very adventurous vibe! :D
I love your way of describing Piñata Island's landscape - especially because everyone who played VP1 MUST recognize it! :D Another thing I thought is awesome, is how in your ''ficverse'' the siblings themselves instead of another, random gardener revived Jardineiro's old garden after its first destruction. When you think about it, that makes a lot of more sense too!
Leafos mentioning how she misses Stardos... Heartbreaking!
The Sour attack was just... awesome! I don't have much to say about it, just that it was written very dynamically and that it had a lot of intense moments. Leafos searching for that shovel was perfect! Love how you described all those Sours and their style of fighting, too!
Overall, great chapter. I'm so excited to read on! Take your time though, and keep up the good work.
| Tiigerliily 4/14/13 . chapter 9
Wow, Kora is really, really clumsy! :P Poor Leafos, having to do all those dangerous things and all... At least she's fighting for a cause of some sort - freeing the Island from Professor Pester and ''avenging'' her ''ceased'' sister!
Like I said before, I love those BearxKora moments! They'd make a very cute couple. I hope things will work out for them! Glad you incorporate Bear's fear of heights mentioned in the game in this story, by the way! I love such details! :D
I'm not surprised that he later re-finds his usual smugness and confidence, though! :P
| Epic Laughter 4/6/13 . chapter 9
AHHHHH, what a fantastic chapter! I absolutely positively LOOOOOOOVED it! This is a great rising action; things are getting SUPER exciting and awesome and GOD I can't wait to read more!
Bear and Kora getting cozy...hehehe! Leafos is acting like me. God, they are cute together. Please kiss. Right now.
I love how you're handling the romance with the main plot! You have a perfect balance of story and romance rather than letting one of the two take over. Commendable and fantastic! :D
By the way, this was TOTALLY WORTH THE WAIT. Hope you can write more sooner!
| Tiigerliily 3/16/13 . chapter 8
I can't get over how awesome you write Jardineiro! :D The way he started talking about his heritage when Leafos wanted to leave was right on spot! I like how Jardineiro dislikes Seedos so severely, hehe! :P Poor kid, though.
How the girls go to Bart for help is perfect! He's a very skilled Tinkerer, which will certainly come in handy at this mission! Ah, Gretchen is working for Pester now, right? I hope she'll be fine... I'd love to read what kind of work she does for him, though!
Bear planting flowers... oh, man. I'm glad Kora caught him doing that, otherwise she would probably never been convinced the tough side of his personality was the one he feigned! The way she punches him on his shoulder instead of hugging him is so cute... and relatable! I get awkward in front of my crushes a lot too so I know where she's coming from, hehe! :P
| Tiigerliily 3/14/13 . chapter 7
Another good chapter! Aw, poor Bear and Kora, I think they could actually make a nice couple. :P
I totally understand Kora being mad at him, though, especially with her bad past experiences.
I love Jardineiro telling the story of what's happened to the Island. Even though he's a bit narcissistic and self-centered at times, he makes a great storyteller!
I really hope Kora's plans succeed so that the Villager's can be free again... I kind of feel bad for Kora for the bad relationship she's got with her parents, though. Hopefully, she'll help her mom out on this! Then she might finally be appreciated and accepted for who she is!
| Tiigerliily 3/14/13 . chapter 6
Ooh, I just realized how much I've missed this story! :D It's so awesome - I like how you've made Piñata Island the property of Pester, it's interesting to see him as an actual dictator for once, he's usually depicted as either a silly, evil villain or just a psychopath. :P
I might've said this before, but the Workers working for Pester really adds to the 'controlled', kind of 'Big Brother' atmosphere. The gardeners can't trust anyone! I feel bad for those Workers, too, though. I'm sure only few of them actually like working for Pester.
You described the Villagers really well! :D Man, I LOVE how Kora can't stand Petula, hehe! Things are bound to get interesting when they're going to have to work together...
Ah, I see you gave Jardineiro a Greek accent! :D That really suits him, in a way... He's half Irish half Spanish in my ficverse, but I love seeing what other people imagine the descent of the character to be! :D
| Epic Laughter 2/27/13 . chapter 8
oh my god I was so right, this was So. Worth. The. Wait! :D
Things are getting more and more exciting each chapter! I'm so glad Kora's got such an awesome team! And hehehe, I love how Bart got convinced to go with them at the mention of Gretchen. I'm so glad you like them together too! They're really perfect for each other. Forget Fannie :P
And Kora and Bear...awwww, what an adorable relationship. They need to kiss right now...or whenever the heck you want them too. Kinda sad he's not gonna join them but hey, you never know what could happen! He might change his mind. Something tells me he wouldn't pass up a chance to be a hero and get his family a better life. But you're the writer and it's up to you! :D
I can't WAIT for more! :D
| Epic Laughter 1/25/13 . chapter 7
Ahhhh, this just gets better and better with every chapter! Kora and Bear's argument was written brilliantly; I especially love how he reacted to her accusations! Claiming not to be a wuss and turning red...it's SO PERFECT. I'm really impressed! You write Bear so well! I love the depths you've given his character; it's so awesome! ;w;
I'm really glad Bear didn't hurt Kora. I like to think that although Bear has a mean streak and can be violent, he'd NEVER, EVER hit a girl. I think that would suit his character quite well. :D
Kora's plan sounds like a real winner! I hope she'll be okay...but if she hits some snags along the way, it would make for some interesting plot points! I'm really looking forward to Leafos' reaction when she learns that her beloved sister is actually alive and not gutted by that awful machine. Storkos kind of has a fate worse than death though; tied up for God knows how long, not able to fly or do ANYTHING...poor girl! Don't worry, Storkos, you'll be rescued soon enough!
I love how you used the Journal to show Kora what Pester looks like too. Soooo perfect! God, everything about this chapter was FANTASTIC. I can't wait for more!
| Epic Laughter 1/16/13 . chapter 6
Ahhh, amazing work, as always! I'm impressed! I love how you so thoroughly described each and every Villager, you did such a fantastic job! :D
Kora getting mad at Bear at the end...oh man, sparks are going to fly! Bear, your tough act is going to be your demise! Something tells me Kora isn't the kind of girl that you want to have mad at you...!
Can't wait to see what happens with that, hehe!
I really hope someone rescues Storkos soon. I feel so bad for her! If Yoto was in your ficverse, he'd probably get himself killed trying to rescue her, oh my God.
Can't wait for more! :D
| Langston Is Great 1/10/13 . chapter 5
I really enjoyed this chapter! I love seeing Dastardos as a jerk. Love what you've done with Bear's character as well. I'll be watching for more!