please continue

Seems intresting

Well, don't feel bad about this, but I can't really say anything yet. There's just not enough of this chapter for me to go on. I like that you have good spelling. The only negative, and this is a slight negative, is the abuse of the pronoun 'She' at the beginning of many sentences.

That sounds good. Two chapters a week will keep me entertained. The storyline is definitely different but its quite interesting. I like how this is going and what is happening. Saya is already one antagonist while we have W*RS as a different antagonist. I honestly can't wait for the fighting to happen.

Seems a bit interesting. Adding to favs.
But some parts of your writing style needs to be changed:
1) too much unnecessary details. E.g. I opened the door and walked out. When you could just put is as 'I walked out.' or 'I walked out of the room through the door'
2) a wider range of vocabulary is needed. Like instead of using the word 'hug' a lot, you could try 'embrace'. (using the thesaurus might help)
3) cut unnecessary dialogue. (explained in 1) you are also encouraged to not use 'said' so much.

I usually just skim through the paragraphs because of the above.
Looking forward to an update, and never stop writing!

Cant wait for the chapters! Only can you try to separate the scenes between reality and Otherworld? It would cause less a headache to read.

need long chapters :D

Nice chapter!

All I could say was, this is a good start, keep on rocking!

I like the way you explain BRS in the Otherworld. She was so IC, yet alluring.

Interesting. Please continue when you can.