|Reviews for Black Rock Shooter : A New Story Begins|
| Guest 3/20/13 . chapter 2
| Ryuuohjin 3/13/13 . chapter 2
| Lucas Bane 12/29/12 . chapter 1
Well, don't feel bad about this, but I can't really say anything yet. There's just not enough of this chapter for me to go on. I like that you have good spelling. The only negative, and this is a slight negative, is the abuse of the pronoun 'She' at the beginning of many sentences.
| animefan106 12/15/12 . chapter 2
That sounds good. Two chapters a week will keep me entertained. The storyline is definitely different but its quite interesting. I like how this is going and what is happening. Saya is already one antagonist while we have W*RS as a different antagonist. I honestly can't wait for the fighting to happen.
| HeadServantJo 12/10/12 . chapter 2
Seems a bit interesting. Adding to favs.
But some parts of your writing style needs to be changed:
1) too much unnecessary details. E.g. I opened the door and walked out. When you could just put is as 'I walked out.' or 'I walked out of the room through the door'
2) a wider range of vocabulary is needed. Like instead of using the word 'hug' a lot, you could try 'embrace'. (using the thesaurus might help)
3) cut unnecessary dialogue. (explained in 1) you are also encouraged to not use 'said' so much.
I usually just skim through the paragraphs because of the above.
Looking forward to an update, and never stop writing!
| fbiuzz 12/10/12 . chapter 2
Cant wait for the chapters! Only can you try to separate the scenes between reality and Otherworld? It would cause less a headache to read.
| Zrye13 12/9/12 . chapter 2
need long chapters :D
| Knight25 12/9/12 . chapter 2
| wind scarlett 12/8/12 . chapter 1
All I could say was, this is a good start, keep on rocking!
I like the way you explain BRS in the Otherworld. She was so IC, yet alluring.
| Knight25 12/8/12 . chapter 1
Interesting. Please continue when you can.