I'm sorry but, your story makes no sense what so ever I mean you need a full plot a "how Claire got kidnapped" and a full story line. I'm know I'm only 12 1/2 but I got a pretty good grasp on writing stories heck I'm evan writing a book right now. So maybe if you could edit it and make it make sense I think it would be really good.

I'm intrigued! Please keep updating!

Loved.

you should put more detail into the chapters because in the second part where Michael eve and shane were looking for Claire I had no idea what was happening but it seems like a good plot

pleaaase updata! this is really good! I want to know what happens next :Pxx

Creepy...AND cool. Update soon!

I like it but I feel as though it's moving too fast.
I mean, in the first chapter she gets the phone call, the gang find out about people going missing and already Claire has been kidnapped. It's all moving too fast, maybe slow down a bit x

Omg update like now! This is really good, I would freak out if i got that phone call! Update please xx

Neat story carry on :)

I loved :O

Love it update soon

P.S- you have a personal review , who will continually review everyone of your chapters :)

Ooh please add more as its not even much SO SHORTTTTT!
UPDATE!