I like the story and style of writing, I can't wait for more.

Great story overall. I have some ideas for your story if you want to hear them :)

Really great, well written story. Hope you could do krieg soon.

Are you dead? Did the skags eat you?

Hey just doing another review suggest an Idea and I understand if you don't use it. The idea is you include some of the side missions in the story. Not all just ones that could either help evolve the characters, fit in some aspect with the story or just for a good laugh.

Like I said I understand if you don't want to use this idea but if you do two I suggest are Assaddinate the Assassins and Claptrap's birthday bash.

The Assassin one because with the four being hired assassin's it's mostly likely Zero will think they were hired to kill Maya and even if they weren't Zero can't risk them being hired later to kill her. The birthday bash one is cause I've just done it and it amused me at how awkward it was and made me feel sorry for Claptrap.

Wow, what an incredibly interesting read! I have to say, it's simply amazing that you're capable of writing over 50,000 words, with the Vault Hunters not even out of Liar's Burg yet. I love how you've managed to basically write 'Zer0 is a dark, mysterious brooding badass and these other Vault Hunters are more or less useless around his awesomeness'. Stretching that out over six chapters must have been quite the arduous task for you.

Oh, true, you take the POV of the other Vault Hunters at times - speaking of which, GREAT job in basically writing out Salvador. I assume this was because you either needed an excuse to slow the pace for more dramatic tension or that you have no idea how to write for his character that would fit your broody angst filled version of Pandora. It's awesome that you've sucked out any and all the humor that made the game appealing.

The fact that over half of what you've written in this fanfic is Zero brooding like a sparkly vampire speaks wonders about your ability to write character. Having him fight like a Gary Stu, never losing or getting himself into trouble while constantly belittling and threatening his fellow Vault Hunters is a great method of going about showing just how much more awesome he is than they are. It's not like the whole purpose of seeking out the Vault for him was a matter of seeking excitement, of relieving his boredom at the lack of challenge he got from assassinations. Or that he can't act professionally with a team considering decades of wetwork experience. Certainly not.

It's also a really, really, really good idea to write out the New-U System in order to make death not cheap. Not like the Fast Travel System more or less uses that concept to transport people from one location to the other anyways! Certainly digistruct modules to store equipment and weapons are also too 'video gamey' for this as well. It's like you don't even need to double check things before finishing a chapter - like everyone but Roland more or less believing that Lilith DIED during the assault on New Haven! I'm sure that a stellar writer like yourself doesn't need to check the canon occasionally to see if there's actual established evidence.

Please, I do hope that further chapters continue on with more interparty bickering, lack of Salvador and humor and everyone being overshadowed by Zer0's pure awesome brooding antihero powers. I suppose you could do the absolute opposite of that, but I'm sure what you're doing now is good enough for you. So Kudos!

This is a well written story, I am greatly interested in how it will develop. Please, update as soon as you can.

Zer0 is an amazing character I'm think he and Maya would go well together both as I can tell in the story have had some hard times Zer0 is still unknown what draw him into the shadows. I hope to see Zer0 starting to trust the others in the future and they all start working as a team. Also with his realese will Krieg be getting a part in this? Just curious.

You're making all the little skag pups cry when you don't update!

I am very interested to see more back story on our favorite Assassin. Hopefully bugger will lighten up to the others eventually. But we shall see.

UPdate! I have nothing epic to read!

It's been too long! UPDATE!

Me likey. Very much likey. So please keep up the good work. The very good work. All my lurve.

-.- awesome bro... just awesome

Nice story. Really loving it so far. Just a question, but does Zer0 ever get friendlier with the rest of the vault hunters? In the game he seems to enjoy their company so I was just wondering if he warms up to them eventually.