|Reviews for Beauty and The Fool - on hiatus|
| newestnightmare 1/29/13 . chapter 5
oh i'am so sorrry that i haven't updated in a while but now that i read it, it certainly captured my full attention and i'am saying this now *goes on knees* UPDATE SOON?
| Guest 1/25/13 . chapter 5
| btbforeva 1/23/13 . chapter 5
PLEASE UPDATE SOON, PLEASE UPDATE SOON! i nheed to know what happened next, you cant leave it like this! i'm sorry but in this chapter i need to know what happened next
| civilwarrose 1/10/13 . chapter 5
So glad you put this up, this was absolutely one of the sweetest fanfic chapters I have read in a while! So "squeeworthy"- is that a word? I love seeing LeFou get some attention from a girl, I adore him too, and I always thought love was what he needed after losing Gaston. :) Paula and Laura are terribly mean and clueless. They should open their eyes and see that Claudia can love whoever she wants to. Considering their age after how much time has passed, those two are terribly immature!
Don't forget about not capitalizing, like "...merely minutes ago?" she cried silently.
| TrudiRose 1/9/13 . chapter 3
I really liked this chapter. You did a great job showing Lefou's thoughts and perspective after Gaston's death - very in-character!
| civilwarrose 1/9/13 . chapter 4
Boy, Avenant sure is a mean jerk but you have to feel for him in the end. His personality parallels the Prince's when he was young, that is a good touch. He is more like him than his brother.
A couple of things for improvement- There are some minor grammatical errors, like having someone saying something followed by a capitalized "He said."
For example: "I don't deserve it!" He cried.
Should be "I don't deserve it!" he cried.
Meaning LeFou YELLED the phrase, not saying the phrase and bursting into tears afterward. Maybe he did, who knows, he seems a sensitive guy despite being able to take physical abuse. :) He's quite in character, by the way. And you are doing a good job creating a character like Avenant, who totally does not want to be like his dead brother but is still acting like someone else very familiar. He almost needs an Enchantress to come along. :)
One thing that took me out of the story flow, though was the use of modern swears and slang, for example Avenant's use of "jerk-r*****-a*****." The word beginning with R is a pet peeve of mine, because I work with special needs kids. And the language doesn't seem to fit the setting/theme. Try to think of words that animated Disney characters would say.
I thought you had an even newer chapter up, and I read it last night and loved it. I guess you decided to re edit, I re-edit chapters after posting sometimes but still keep them up.
| btbforeva 12/26/12 . chapter 4
poor lefou, surely this guy cant be pushed around, i will be patient by your next update! update soon
| newbornphanatic 12/19/12 . chapter 2
love this chapter mostly girls, and me certainly know how claudia feels
| newestnightmare 12/15/12 . chapter 1
im soooo likeing this story, a bimbette and lefou story now i havent been seeing this in AGES! oh please update soon!
| civilwarrose 12/12/12 . chapter 1
I am excited to see this! I am always happy to read a story on LeFou and the Bimbettes because they are characters who I have a soft spot in my heart for. Your take on Claudia is interesting! They are shown in the movie so little, and so they are open to interpretation. So if one of them actually has a brain "upstairs" and fell out of love with Gaston and ends up preferring Lefou instead, I am for it! :) Personally, I don't even think of Lefou as ugly at all, probably because I saw the play version once, and he was played by a nice looking young boy. When writing him in my own stories I actually picture him as cute in an average Joe kind of way anyway, but just a bit over five feet tall and beer bellied, lol. Nothing wrong with that, and he's funny too. Claudia should just go ahead and go after him!
I had to go to your other story about Lucille to find the background on Avenant, glad you are using the "brother" idea. Sounds like Avenant sees the triplets as more like annoying sisters to him than romantic prospects, so that is a different take. Good job on this!
| TrudiRose 12/12/12 . chapter 1
Aw! This is so cute! I love Lefou and I'm always happy to see him get attention in stories!
I also like it when the Bimbettes are written as individuals rather than identical.
Claudia needs to grow a backbone and focus on her own happiness instead of worrying what other people think. Hopefully that will happen over the course of this story.
I think you should work in a little summary of your other story, because this is cute enough to stand on its own, but with all the references to Avenant and Lucille, readers who haven't read the other story will be confused. Even I was confused at first when you mentioned "Belle's freaky daughter", until I realized this was connected to your other story, not a stand-alone.
(Also, one tiny nitpick: when you have dialogue followed by any form of "he said," the "he said" is part of the SAME sentence, so it should be lowercase.)