Dear Writer,

I have been reviewing your work, attempting to assist you in the modification and perfection of your literary work; and I have noticed some patterns that I think you should be aware of. Your intuition and interpretation of the human psyche is well developed and integrated in your favor. For example, in "The Heart of the Cards" Ebon's perspective on life and his internal identity waver and change, which is supportive of the belief that only the most adaptable survive. I have also noticed that the majority of your work focuses on internal dialouge and social interactions, which can be your greatest asset, or your geatest enemy; which is not unlike the nature and reverbrations of the heart. Those who possess a dexterity to psychology tend to be deeply devoted and involved with other people; and as you seem to be a budding psychologist, I advise you to stay open to the beliefs of others, but do not let those beliefs overtake your own.

However, exploring and exploiting too much of your psychological dexterity too often doesn't usually make for a good story. I humbly suggest that you look and wander off your current literary path to consider intigrating something new into your works. After all, they do say that a little variety never hurt anyone. Overall, Xan, my opinion is simply that your writing is a precious outpouring of the soul, and it should never be strained for the conveinence of others. As you struggle to make a connection to other internal realities, rely only on the truth of your heart, and you might find that a piece of yourself lives on through the readers who made the connection.

Good story. I like how you have a good sense of people's emotions. I hope this story has helped you in the long, hard quest of being a good writer.

Respectfully,

No one special, really.

HEY YOU you owe me chapter. Yeah that's right. I told you that your story was REALLY good and you HAD to write more...and you said you would...it is now...oh...say...4 MONTHS LATER lol I CAN'T WAIT THAT LONG update soon pez?

Julie

YOU MUST WRITE MORE YOU HAVE TA YOU HAVE TA YESH YESH YESH WRITE MORE! ME LIKE A LOT PLEASE WRITE MORE!

Julie

nice...but you made a mistake

when you attack a blue eyes in defense mode it only has 2500 defense points and you wouldn't have lost . just thought i'd let you know

FINALLY! [grin] Definitely ecstatic that incessant pestering works in the motivation category. Must make note and put process into effect next time Demon comes down with writer's block. _

When are you going to make up your mind about Ebon's gender? Personally, I like Ebon as a guy. But then again... gah, don't let me confuse myself. One vote for guy-Ebon! [waves little flag in air]

Interesting new character (love her personality, although her childish ways are reminiscent of Ryan's- gah!)There weren't any physical descriptions though, so right now I'm left visualizing someone who looks suspiciously like Ryan in a Dark Magician girl outfit... o_O

Oh, dear lord, I did NOT just see that. Anyone mention "disturbing images"?

I think I need to go wash my brain out.

Enough gleeful ranting! Continue soon! _

I love this story! More soon, please!

Hey, just to let you know, I think the chapters are kind of screwed up between 8 and 9. For example, chapter 8 version 2 and ch. 9 are the same thing, and its really kind of confusing. You might want to check that. Nice story so far.

Your storyline and characters have really developed. I agree with the anonymous person; Will and Ebon would be an excellent pairing. I have but one comment left: Curse your evil (yet bloody brilliant) cliffhangers! _

Water Omotics and Will or maybe Ebon and Will

Ooh, good cliffhanger, keep people in suspense...

Cool, but you really should have them reveal their

fave cards. (Besides Ivy and the main.)

Hey! Um, Angel of Darkness? Well, if you read this, sure you can be in the story! (If you weren't joking or anything... in which case I'll feel REALLY REALLY stupid! _)

So what kind of personality/role do you have/want? I'm pretty loose on the outcome of this story. Do you have an e-mail adress?

Thanx,

Demon

Great job- This is very good! I hope that u continue soon!

That is a slightly mysterious why do U have a BEUD when it's a fusion of 3 Blue Eyes?ANd U didn't anwser my I be in the story?

PLEASE?Anyway,please update soon.I have a feeling that Kennie was turned into his favorite usually my feelings are right.