|Reviews for The Diary of Midshipman Deryn Sharp|
| Middy Miles 12/27/12 . chapter 1
Trust me, hon, that was NOT short. I've seen some that are little more than a few lines.
Anyway, this isn't bad. You've managed to capitalize and punctuate where necessary, with few mistakes, which is always the first thing I look for :). You'll improve with time, I'm sure, but try to slow it down a little, add some more setting and scene descriptions. I know you're just trying to get the purpose across at this point, but, really, it isn't necessary to go into extensive detail, so just add a few things here and their. Maybe the toast could be burnt on a corner or something. I dunno.
And I think "midshipman" only has one "p"...
| Siri Kenobi95 12/20/12 . chapter 2
Great chapters! Deryn is perfectly in character and it feels like it could actually fit into the Leviathan universe. And LOL at the Trousers and Newkirk incidents! XD
| Guest 12/18/12 . chapter 2
I fell sorry for Deryn. I really do. :P
I loved it! :D wright more please!
| MemyselfandI373 12/18/12 . chapter 2
Heh, silly Newkirk. I like weird, so it's okay :)
| jibblitmuffins3675 12/13/12 . chapter 1
I love it! Wright more! :D
| MemyselfandI373 12/13/12 . chapter 1
'My favorite trousers!' Lol, nice job.