Trust me, hon, that was NOT short. I've seen some that are little more than a few lines.
Anyway, this isn't bad. You've managed to capitalize and punctuate where necessary, with few mistakes, which is always the first thing I look for :). You'll improve with time, I'm sure, but try to slow it down a little, add some more setting and scene descriptions. I know you're just trying to get the purpose across at this point, but, really, it isn't necessary to go into extensive detail, so just add a few things here and their. Maybe the toast could be burnt on a corner or something. I dunno.
And I think "midshipman" only has one "p"...

Great chapters! Deryn is perfectly in character and it feels like it could actually fit into the Leviathan universe. And LOL at the Trousers and Newkirk incidents! XD

I fell sorry for Deryn. I really do. :P
I loved it! :D wright more please!

Heh, silly Newkirk. I like weird, so it's okay :)

I love it! Wright more! :D

'My favorite trousers!' Lol, nice job.