Loved the quote at the beginning and it was an Interesting chapter overall though it did feel a bit rushed if I'm honest. Nothing I can really pin down, it's just that the pacing was too quick; however I'm aware that you decided on this format from the beginning and we were all aware of that when we came into this story so that's fine.

The main problem I have is the OOC actions going on here, with Shiho and Saori. I find it a bit hard to believe that Shiho would brake down like that so publicly, alone with Erich perhaps but not like that. Up to that point though you did it very well, in such a way that it implied she missed him perhaps but she didn't explicitly say it.

Erich's part in that was handled well and it implied that the "breakup" was less one sided and more mutual than a lot of us thought, which is good.

Finally there's Saori. She has always been pretty good at reading the room, and I really don't think she would bring up something like becoming Monty's fiance while they were getting shot at and he was busy jinking. She may be "The Chick" but she isn't as aloof as most such characters, she's actually pretty thoughtful in that way.

Finally Shiho and Erich meet! Can't wait when Erich finally meets Miho...

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, keep up the good work!

THIS IS AWESOME!

I was surprised Shiho was actually able to show emotion. I fell out of my chair when i read Saori's question though it was really funny for w/e reason. I hope the next chapter will have some more family drama, along with a nice helpful taste of action to even it out!

Great story with lots of potential Keep it up my friend!

Well you can count the Kuromormine tanks out of the fight for awhile. The crews would be dazed and possibly not able to continue. Two 500lb bombs make a loud racket and the concussion waves would deafen them for the rest of the day at least.

cliffhangers are valid plot devices...even if they annoy the crap outta me! keep it up!

Really good! Enjoyed reading your story. Hope you can add more chapters soon.

Hah, Saori's first flight made her airsick. Keep up the good work.

Awesome but please bring the 229 back in, its a beuty.

Ya know, this is good, but its goddamn too short! D: Stop giving us cliffhangers! TT. On the other note, Saori got her first taste flying is really making me giggle. Good work on that oh and Reunions, I want Miho to see her Dad too! Anyway, its a good story so good luck and continue writing this fic! - Fuji92

The suspense is making me twitch. Great chapter! I smell family reunion sometime in the future, omg that would be the most awesome thing EVER! if it is in the future i can't w8 to see it! Hope you update soon, I'm really enjoying it.

oh dear, saori is probably gonna be SICK! keep up the good work, update as soon as you can.

This suspense is so heavy the story just gets better and better added the romance thats just great im staring at this website and refreshing until a new one comes out

I scrolled down once and it was over...FUUUUUUU WHY MUST I READ SO FAST?! and WHY MUST THIS STORY BE SO DAMN INTERESTING!...now i need a new chapter T_T

Oh shit nearly forgot to to review... NEED NEW CHAAPTER FUCK!