Victoria scares me.
Run Emet, runnn! D:
This is quite interesting, all-in-all. I hope to see more of it!

You did a great job keeping them in character. I know how hard it can be sometimes, writing for other people's characters. Victoria also is developing very well. I can't wait to see what happens next. :)

Hey I really like this! Everyone is very in-character, Victoria is no where near being a mary-sue like most OCs I've seen, and it's just very well written in general.

You're doing great so far. Keep up the good work!
-Purple Spider

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Interesting concept, I look forward to the next chapter.

A tip for Victoria. Your OC is very high sprung and enerjetic; which is good for a WU fic. However when creating a character from scratch it is important to have balance. No one can be that energetic ALL the time. Think of realistic situations or conditions that would make the character calm or reserved, even withdrawn. Maybe she expresses anger openly, but is sullen when something truely upsets her. Or perhaps she becomes flustered clams up when someone is genuinly nice/interested in her. Just a few ideas.

Great start though. I'll see you in chapter two.