OMG.
I
LOVE THIS.
Need I say anymore!?
LOVE THIS.
Dude u just wrote perfection
Capture everything needed to have and simply amazing xDD
WONDERFUL WORK :D

Whoa...T-This...this is...Whoa...XD
I don'tthink either of them were OOC at all This went extremely in-depth, and I think you captured Kazehaya perfectly! *faves*

not too ooc., because it really could happen, great job at writing this story! :D if shouta's keeping back a lot, imagine his frustration when he's alone in his room :P haha.., anyway, its a good story, keep up the good work! :D

I love this. Your writing style is so similar to narrations in the manga. And btw, I can seriously imagine this happening in the manga. Kazehaya bottles up all the emotions concerning Sawako and, if given the chance, he would get all possessive on her. Sorry. I'm rambling now.

Wow. Given that I just finished watching the whole anime series, it's kinda off-putting to hear their sweet story become something this dark and gripping. But then, Kazehaya has always been impatient and possessive, so I guess this is totally possible. Great work.

This is strangely not too ooc to me. It came off as something that could have happened, had the author decide to stir off the good ol innocent young love route. Love your voice of Sawako, you wrote her confusion and her gradual realization well.

And Yes, I do agree with you that kazehaya is totally holding back! Would you be writing this story in his POV? ;)

o.O
Yeah, you were were lots of OOC moments. But i really liked "selfish Sawako". She rocks!