|Reviews for Masquerade- rewrite|
| Middy Miles 2/25/13 . chapter 2
I like this, but you have typos and a lot of comma splices. (That's when you use a comma when there should be a period.) For example: I had a plate of cupcakes sitting on the table, Avishikta, my beautiful black dog, grabbed one off of the glass plate.
There should be a period after table, or a conjunction like "and". There's a subject and predicate in the first part and the second, and they are not connected by anything, so they are two separate sentences and should not be joined by a comma.
But other than that, this isn't bad.
| jibblitmuffins3675 1/4/13 . chapter 3
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOH! POSTTHENEXTBARKINGCHAPTER!
| jibblitmuffins3675 12/30/12 . chapter 2
Cute! Post the next chapter soon! :D
| jibblitmuffins3675 12/30/12 . chapter 1
To tell you the truth, I like this one better. :)
Please update soon. ;)