My, that review a few down is a bit melodramatic, isn't it?

I enjoyed parts of your story, and other parts less so. Besides the somewhat repeated themes, you just made Nire UNNECESSARILY powerful. She never actually does things that warrant the godlike power you give her. You could have her be 1/10th as powerful, but just particularly bright, and still accomplish what she does. Raistlin defeated a goddess. You make Nire stronger than Raistlin. What does Nire defeat? A group of thugs, a few teenage bullies, and a maze. She just does not require the level of power you're giving her for the (non divine) plotline to function, and it probably alienated quite a few readers.

Now that I mention it, the Ao (or whatever his name is) segment was awkward, at best. It seemed very much an afterthought, and his logic was horrible. Surrounding people in an unsupportive upbringing doesn't teach them to rely on themselves, it teaches them to have horribly low self confidence and be angry at the world. An all knowing incredibly wise figure shouldn't make such a silly blunder - it just seems like you were trying to justify things you'd previously written, rather than having something plotted out from the start.

If this comes across as overly harsh, I apologize, I did enjoy a fair portion of your story. I don't particularly expect you to continue this story, let alone revise it, but hey - reader's duty to review and all that.

This is an extremely good fanfiction. One of the best forgotton realms/dragonlance I have ever seen. I am not peticurly optimistic about you continuing, seeing as it's been a year and a half since you updated last, but I really wish you would.

PLEASE FINISH THE STORY!
I KNOW YOU HAVEN'T UPDATE FOR MORE THAN A YEAR BUT CAN'T YOU JUST FINISH IT?
IT'S GOOD (IT KIND OF GOT REALLY ANGSTY, BUT IT'S GOOD).

I absolutely loved your story, and I absolutely loved Nire. And your portrayal of Jander is very good. Your story is so good that I could not add a letter into my story, it will be late almost 2 days, and you're the one to blame :P

I love the puppy! More chappies! More must have more! Please?
Nire is such a cool character... *is jealous because all her characters always seem so pathetic, then remembers that she herself is pathetic* Life's been a ** and I'm ready to die, not sure how though... *is grumpily pensive*

I'd like to say I am enjoying your story so far, but it's become painful to read :( This Nire of yours... You've developed her ... wrong. You say she is fat and imply that she is ugly... you create emotional problems, but that doesn't seem to hinder her in any way but making 'friends'. She's fat... but she's "so good" at the sword fighting etc? Wow. She's emotionally unstable... yet she's ALMOST AS GOOD AS RAISTLIN when itcomes to spellcasting. She's unpleasant and sour as anyone. YET PEOPLE STILL LIKE HER LOLOLOL. lol. IT MUST BE A JOKE! ^_^_^_^_^_^^_^_^_^ I think I GET IT roflmaomorflalol
SHE'S SO BRILLIANT that she can come up with a potion that eludes people who should be much more intelligent than her. (Pretty much all spellcasters mentioned in the story *cough* Raistlin)
Look, you'll get negative thoughts from this review and defensive of your precious character. Please understand that I think you have awesome potential as a writer, but I can simply not go on reading about this thing you call Nire.
Your Story's **, Serryn. ROFLRMOAROFLARJOFLOL kaybye

right hello again it me finn and well just warning you i added you to my msn i'm boardingschoolbrat@hotmail.com or gimpy ayways don't block me right away .. wait till you glimps the insity that school has impressed on me just doing so you dont think i'm a weird phsyco like my house diecter assumes everyone msn is anyways bye

finn

Hi,
I just finished reading the whole thing and I love it. The only thing that gets me sometimes is the mispellings but that's understandbly any writer's greatest mistake. I can see the story play out in my head. I love a story I can watch as well as read.

Hi,
I just finished reading the whole thing and I love it. The only thing that gets me sometimes is the mispellings but that's understandbly any writer's greatest mistake. I can see the story play out in my head. I love a story I can watch as well as read.

hi umm ya just got back gr8 adds to the plot i love tenebrae my stupid parents wont let me get a dog oh well not that i would actually take care of it still dogs are cool now i'm just rambeling oh well whatever hm right i meant to ask are all you nire stories inter conected cause i was looking @ the other stories you've written and in umm whats it called *goes into author bio thingy* ah here it is All The World I've Seen Before Me Passing By vair good storie so far bye the way. i can only read to chappie 7 right now though i keep on getting a site overload message for chappie 8 but i can guesse what might happen and who her myserious ex is anyways oh i can get to chapter 8 now! *reads chappie* hm so jander and nire are together she now has a band and has been adopted by whats-his-name, left her real family behind jeez i really hope there inter conected!

awsome love it love the new chapter and the puppys lov eit

Hm... how can i say this without hurting your feeling? Oh wait, i can't ha ha. Just kidding. This fanfic is getting kinda... boring and anticlimatic or however you spell it. But don't worry, i'll still read it.
Anyways... when are they gonna meet Deurmont (don't know how to spell his name. You know... the Sea Sprite or however you spell that. I'm horrible with spelling) and the Companions of the Hall?

love it i cannot wait for ch 28 love it

damn damn and double damn im Leaving for 3 weeks AND I WILL HAVE NO INTERNET CONECTION. the world is agianst! me i wont know if you update or what happens for 3 WEEKS. god hates me. anyways i love your story (how much do you here that?) i love nire she's so cool. she can really deal. i live in a family like hers so i can kinda relate. cept its my sis whos depressed and suicidal right now not me. you got the emotions perfect. damn why is it that i find gr8 stories RIGHT before i go away? anyways SHE IS A GODLING? so when's she gonna tell jander'n'raist? i can't wait to read that! hm looks like thats it i think. which is bad. thinking is bad'n'evil'n'mean.

my mind is gone / i can not think / i have not brought my brain with me / i have not brought my brain with me / cause its summer !

the last line doesn't really work but oh well, guesse i'll stick to the 'i hate everything about you' song by three days grace it's really ** my parents off. you wouldn't think they'd spazz at you for blasting music at three in the morning but there you go. so odd. anyways update lots! and gr8 story and other such stuff that you usually get in reviews.

Whoopie! Go people. I just realized... you call the Heroes of the Lance the heroes of the lance and say that Raist already killed his bro's illusion. Um... in the book that they become the Heroes of the lance... Sturm Brightblade and Flint Firestone (i think thats his last name...) die! so does Tanis... eventually...