*CRYING*is the only i'll say.

as i said before (about me writing almost the same story)i'll tell you the end of it(don't tell anyone ok ;) in my story mikoto died(the only thing i'll say) ...so i'm exited to see what is the end of your . pls again don't tell anyone the end of an upcoming story ok(even thought i might end up not writing it cause it's almost the same your story was (but different style thought ) and pls believe me TT

(PLS READ THIS CAREFULLY ) OK your free to bleive what i'm gonna write next ..."i really and i SWORE i wrote a story like this2 years ago(it was like mikoto turning into an angles and the wings ...ex)ONLY IN MY NOTEBOOK ...and it was expanded more(Acceleator ,last order,and all other were into this) so i fell SO SAD someone wrote it ...even thought it's so awesome...but if i write my story now they'll say that i was somehow copping you..which is not ...PLS HELP I DON'T KNOW IF I'M GONNA WRITE MY STORY ANYMORE :( :( :(

I really loved that Mikoto is dragged to magic side in your story ..i hope they'll do that in the manga or the anime thought(it would be awesome)

I'm so in love in this story .

THIS WAS AWESOME...i knew one of the kidnappers ..it's stily isn't he ? .

OMG 3 WORDS YOUR SO AWESOME XD

I'M DYING TO KNOW WHAT GONNA HAPPEN NEXT...p.c:it's mikoto who should be the one to fall in love with him that hard ..cause i don't think touma's feelings developed yet..but the heck with that I LOVED THE STORY SO FAR AND I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT

Hell yeah i'm so in love in this story XD 3 LOVEEEEEEEEE IT ...MY HEART REALLY WAS BEATING SO FAST WHILE READING IT ...PLS WRITE MORE STORIES ABOUT THEM ..MIKOTO X TOUMA 4 EVER BABY O

OMG I LOVED THIS CHAPTER 3 3 THX PLS WRITE MORE ABOUT THEM KYAAAAAA I'M MELTING .

I'm a huge kamikot fan so pls keep writing about them(i want more romace O) and i'm really enjoying the story keep on _

Hello, it's me, PokeRescue18. I'm back to write a critical review on this story as well as the sequel:
When I fully read this story, I'm glad the plot ended up nicely, yet there are questions left unanswered: What kind of sickness Mikoto was hiding? How long will their relationship last? I guess these questions will be answered in the sequel.
I'm here to address the flaws that I've discovered during my story analysis. You don't seem to follow the usual form of dialogue, for example:
"But you're not exactly going to 'leave them alone' now are you?"-Kuroko
That is not the proper way of writing dialogue. In fact, this is supposed to be the correct way.
"But you're not exactly going to 'leave them alone' now are you?" Kuroko snickered.
Adding a verb at the speaker during the dialogue adds life to the sentence, instead of leaving the readers hanging of what.
Another thing, you left quite a lot of other characters unresolved. Sure, this story focuses on Touma and Mikoto, yet you seem to leave out other characters like Friedrich, Laura Steward. or even Aliester Crowley. Sure, their roles may be of less importance, but you shouldn't leave them out for the sake of the protagonists. A good story should conclude everything in a discreet way. I know I may sound harsh in this, but this is a critical review after all.
Remember in my first review that I'd offer my services to you as a beta reader? I'm still available, and you can learn a lot from me as your beta. All writers start out small; I'm no different. I hope you've been reading the reviews of your stories; I would love to read your response.
Up next, I'll be reviewing "Facing Your Fears: Loss". Keep writing!
PokeRescue18

cool story

Loved it can't wait for part 2 to come our

what the i didn't know there was going to an epilogue -_- one question: are you going to make the sequel a one shot or another mutichapter story? if you do a oneshot you could tell about mikoto's final moment and you do a multichapter you could tell about mikoto's journey to oblivion either way i dont think the ending is going to be pretty...oh by the way nice job with the epilogue you've created one hell of a cliffhanger. personally i don't fancy sad ending but your story just fit well with it. oh well keep up the good work and oh im thinking about making a TAMNI fanfic myself. let me know what you think about ;D