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Shaldana Blackwater 1/10/05 . chapter 13I absolutely adored every second of this fic. Oh, I know, it took me awhile to find it, but it had me laughing in all of the good parts, and I love a good snarky Snapefic, even if he's being snarky in the nicest way possible. Thanks for this! |
saladhawk 11/23/04 . chapter 13hehehe :D That one is great! Finally an interesting, very funny, non dark piece of work. Seeing how most of the really good things with a nice plot and good writing are dark, I really needed that! *g* Took me a full day to read all of it though. Well, almost... XD I'm just happy it was already finished when I started: no need to wait for the next chapter. *g* |
Deritine 10/28/04 . chapter 13M. Well, enjoyed that. While there was perhaps more fluff than plot, that was all to the good. And the plot was wonderful. Unexpected twists with Dumbledore dying. Confused about a couple things, though: how did Voldemort live and why are they sure he's dead this time? how was it a secret that Dumbledore was a Slytherin? Can't anyone look it up if they want? What was that in the beginning about a girl who attacked Harry? I don't think that got quite explained. I think that's all the confusing bits. Very enjoyable. I noted many spelling errors, some of the evil kind where it is a word, but not the right one, but as per request not saying them all, and there were quite a few. But nothing major. I liked when Harry said that if Snape didn't recognize when someone was defending him then it hadn't been done enough. Very poignant. Yes. Very good. |
Dreamfall 10/11/04 . chapter 13Quite nice:) Molly's reaction was everything I could have hoped for, and Draco was suitably Slytherin. Good story! Ah, and one more line that I loved, Hermione again: "if anyone needs us, try not to." *grin* Excellent! |
Dreamfall 10/11/04 . chapter 3I was going to wait till I got to the end to post a review, but I thought I'd respond to your author's note. First off, let me say there _have_ been a couple great lines- I loved Hermione's "What took you so long?" That was just perfect! I also really enjoyed "That was very bad. On a grand scale of bad things, it was the model that all bad things aspired to." Kinda reminiscient of Terry Pratchett. There was another one but I seem to have lost it *sigh* I'm really enjoying the story thus far. The characters seem mostly in character- and if not completely in character at least consistent. I really liked Ron's reaction to the news- shock and disbelief and anger at Snape but after that first wave of shock willing to listen and think. And the H/D/R relationship is a really interesting touch I haven't seen before and I like a lot. But I also wanted to mention, in regards to proof reading (yours is much better editted than many stories I've seen, by the way) there are a couple techniques that can be really helpful in catching the little things. One is reading it aloud- you tend to stumble when you get to a typo more obviously than when just reading silently. The other, time consuming but very effective, is to start at the end, read the last sentence, then go back to the previous sentence and read it, and so on. Since you can't get into the flow of the prose your mind doesn't just replace what you actually see with what it expects to see. I know you specifically asked for no typo/grammar stuff, but I hope you'll forgive- I just thought you might like some techniques. So sorry if it's unwelcome, and I'm going back to reading now! |
futagoat02 10/7/04 . chapter 13wonderful story! really like it, it has everything to want! although, i can't really see ron and draco together... baibaiyukie |
Cartilong 9/25/04 . chapter 13I've just re-read this for the fifth or sixth time. I just wanted to let you know that I loved this line: "...Sirius was an idiot and should register somewhere for remedial classes in 'the bloody obvious'." I laughed so hard I almost fell out of my chair. I hope you don't mind if I use that. Several of my family members are often in need of such classes. |
NOYB 9/25/04 . chapter 1 You had the making of a really good story here, the interactions with the characters seemed very credible and plausible, not at all OOC. But i'm sorry to say, I just couldn't finish the story because your spelling was really poor. I don't mean to be negative or anything but i'd suggest that you work on that in future. And by the way, it's not 'color', it's 'collar'. :) |
netbyrd 9/20/04 . chapter 12I cannot believe I read this whole thing. I can't stand Snape or Draco, and yet, you have characterized them in a way that made give in to all the recomendations and read this fic. I rather enjoyed the story, which really surprised me. I liked the interaction between Ron, Draco, and HErmione the best, and I was able to get past the teacher/student relationship (though I admit, I did scroll past the more involved love scenes between Harry and Snape...) Good Job! |
valanthe 8/23/04 . chapter 1I I COOL this is an awsome story. |
Maxwell Demon 8/16/04 . chapter 13That was very well done. With the exception of a few grammar/spelling problems (which I won't mention) your characterization was excellent and your plot, for the most part, was understandable and enjoyable. Congratulations. |
Sarah 8/10/04 . chapter 13 I really like your fic. It was both funny and heart-warming. I’m glad that you ended the fic with the spell wearing off and Harry and Sev actually choosing to be together. The scene in the Weasley’s kitchen in the end was great. And I definitely think that you’re right about Dumbeldore. He must be a slytherin. And WOW, what a threesome: Ron, Draco and Hermione, that was brilliant. I’ver always thought that Ron and Hermione together are a bit dull, but when you add Draco it suddenly becomes A LOT MORE INTERESTING. |
Kroven 8/8/04 . chapter 13 Damn! I would be more spcific but I can't be...this is just...damn! It was one of THE BEST storys I ever read...it made me ache, it made me lol,it made me ache,it made me cry and then for the sake of it it made me ache some more! So to put it in one word...DAMN! :D |
Irihi Safaia 7/20/04 . chapter 13gawd do I love this story! *smiles blissfully and passes out* |
Irihi Safaia 7/20/04 . chapter 8*blissfully* oh yes, I found the rest... why isn't this posted over on AFF? *hums to herself and continues her night-long read-a-thon* |