While I really like the story, you have a lot of spelling errors/ word confusion/ word misusage. You should get a Beta for this story.

Haha I totally caught the references in this chapter, but I'll have to search the last one! Fantastic, as usual ;) I can't wait until your next update! ;D

well I like it I hope you have the next one soon!

Cool, I will wait for Chapter 18.

American football is rugby for wusses :) they wear tons of pads and aren't allowed to fight ;) Down here in Texas (american) football is king, after seeing some British rugby games I'm convinced its a load of shit 8)
Now wheelchair rugby. THAT'S badass.
xoxo
HFT

Spiced peaches are like summer. They are like cinnamon and nutmeg and wood-smoked peach, sweet carmelized maple sugar pooling in the red pit crater.

Please update more often :) I love this story, and I love how you made jareth calm and serious like that lol makes him more sexy ;)

HI! I'm enjoying youor story so far. The bit where Sarah checked to make sure Toby wasn't a goblin was cute. In the 2nd to last paragraph, it's a "drawer," not a "draw." I know a lot of people say it like "draw," but it's not the right word. I'm looking forward to the rest of the story!

Mmm David Bowie.. ;D

Ahahahaha, that was awesome! I knew Kyle was gonna be a douche bag! Kinda reminds me of a Kyle I know.. Anyway, great chapter, I'm definitely following this story until the end.

Interesting, giving Sarah a date and having Toby question her decision. I like the slight age difference from the movie as well, it gives it a nice dose of individuality. :)

So far this is looking really good, I'm excited to see where it goes. :)
Your amazing word choices make it look more professional as well, showing off your apparently excellent vocabulary. Please, keep up the awesome work!

Lovely chapter! I'll never think of hide and seek the same way again ;)

AAAAA! its nothing I like this I hope you can get the next one soon ::)

Cool, I Will wait for Chapter 19.