|Reviews for The 18th: Standing in their Graves|
| ImmyRose 2/25/13 . chapter 8
Calder: He doesn't seem to be a very hardcore Career, since he's quite easy-going, relaxed and a fairly decent person that likes surfing, which is a archetype common in District Four (for SOME reason). However, I love the fact that he doesn't see the Games as "one big adventure" like some surfer-types seem to, which is more realistic. Actually, he doesn't seem very Career-ish to me, since he just seems to be a fun-loving guy who has a sense of humour and doesn't stress out about much. The fact that there isn't a volunteer is still realistic at this stage, so I don't mind that and it fits with his character as well. Yeah, I'll probably like him.
Sawyer: Eh, I'm not really fond of her. Like, she just seems to be completely obsessed with volunteering and manipulating others and there isn't really much that Sawyer does outside that, so she doesn't really pique my interest. I'm not really sure why she's like that either, although I guess you'll explore that later on in the Capitol. She's clever and will probably do well in the Games though, since she managed to manipulate the Peacekeeper into being nearer the stage. And her relationship with her dad was interesting as well; I wonder if there's more to that than meets the eye. That was probably the part that caught my attention the most out of her POV.
Finally, I have caught up with the reviewing :3 Anyway, now I am in a position to be really awkward and go "update soon" ;P
| ImmyRose 2/25/13 . chapter 7
Marlee: Her first name just reminds me of Marley & Me. Anyway, her sister is pretty awesome, being quite rebellious and a little childish. Actually, Marlee's family dynamic in general is awesome, and it was more intriguing to me than the typical "nice, normal" family types that you see a lot. Marlee is also pretty cool herself, since she's quite sarcastic and cynical but she isn't unrealistic or anything like that. Also, I like how she acts around Skye, and she's also one of the tributes that I like the most at this moment in time.
Elmo: Oh yeah, I've kind of heard of that. I think it's called Saint Elmo's Fire, or something like that. Even though I'm reminded more of that red puppet guy xD Anyway, he's a pyromaniac, which I'm guessing is the reason that he's named Elmo. And the best part is that he's also pretty crazy and psycho as well as being a pyromaniac (also, he actually has a personality outside being a pyro, which is always a plus), which makes me adore him 3 And his friends are just as crazy as he is. I like the fact that he tried to fight back as opposed to simply walking up to the stage as that shows a bit about his personality as well.
District Five are definitely one of my favourite districts this year, along with Two and Eight so far :P
| ImmyRose 2/25/13 . chapter 6
Phi: Eh, I'm not a fan of names that begin with the same letter and this isn't any exception. However, I like his character a lot more. The fact that he's not actually breathtakingly attractive and handsome and such is different, since most people seem to make their tributes average-looking or model-quality gorgeous. Also, he's a heartless killer who happily kills others purely because of what this Clementine girl tells him. I'm not entirely sure why he's so desperate to prove himself to her enough that he'd kill and volunteer for the Hunger Games where he'll probably die didn't strike me as very logical, but then again, he doesn't seem to be particularly sane and I'm guessing that Clementine was manipulating him, judging from her POV after Phi had volunteered. I wonder if Phi will even find out about her true intentions and come to regret his decisions later on in the Capitol; that would certainly be interesting. Anyway, he's probably one of my favourites since he's such an awful person, yet isn't some all-knowing, manipulating killer extraordinaire like some non-Career tributes I see a lot in SYOTs.
Cathodra: I agree that compared to Phi, she doesn't really stick out in comparison, although at least she isn't on the verge of a mental breakdown or reacting in an over-dramatic way to being Reaped. She is quite typical for a District Three tribute as she's clever, educated and an engineer, but she isn't boring to me and is still quite interesting. I just prefer Phi a lot more than her, but I'll look forwards to seeing her develop more as a character later on :)
| ImmyRose 2/25/13 . chapter 5
Shiloh: Interesting - and nice - name here, although I'll probably end up spelling it wrong at least once before this story is over xD He seems to be quite creative and artistically inclined, which are traits I quite like seeing in characters. Also, he does it to escape from his less-than-perfect life, which is interesting and definitely something that you can imagine in the real world as well. I like the reasoning behind why his parents - especially his mother - were so close to them as it's something that I haven't seen before (and it's plausible), and it must be awful for Shiloh's mother as her only surviving child is now in the Games. Although I like him, I can't see him doing too well on his own.
Visca: Again, another unique name, and Visca is also a really interesting tribute. Obviously disfigured tributes aren't rare as there would be a lot of accidents in the poorer districts, but I've never seen anybody go into the Games without their nose, and the way she got it was quite sad as well. I'm glad that her backstory ACTUALLY affects her personality and isn't just randomly added in there for the hell of it. Anyway, I'm guessing that her lack of a nose is the reason that she hates attention so much, which probably won't help her out much in the Games. Aside from that, I didn't get as much of a strong personality from her as I did with Shiloh, so I don't like her as much as her district partner.
| ImmyRose 2/25/13 . chapter 4
District Twelve! Admittedly, this district has never been a favourite of mine and these two tributes haven't changed this much, but I liked reading about them anyway and their personalities were out across even if the tributes themselves are not to my taste.
Eris: He's one of those naive, cheery and generally nice kids, which are the types of tributes that I rarely appreciate until they die (well, if he dies, that is). However, I like his relationship with his sister when he was playing with her and it was a nice touch, even though we won't see much of that in the arena (so it's a good thing that you included it now). I like his character a little more than I usually do, since he doesn't seem to be one of those overwhelmingly cliche 'nice' tributes.
Kyra: I like her name as it's normal and not district-related, but still sounds nice. Anyway, Kyra also seems to be quite a nice, normal girl that isn't prepared for the situation that she's been put in, and she seems to be quite considerate of others as well. Her Goodbyes were nice to read about, what with her large family and such, and I love her friendship with Daly. She's a little similar to Eris, so I guess that they'll get along somewhat, at least.
| nb1998 2/24/13 . chapter 6
Ahh another really great chapter, district three always seems to produce some great tributes and these two are no exception. Phi is my favourite here. He's really unique, people always make their tributes at least average looking but this guy isn't even that.. he's ugly which I think will be interesting when it comes to making him get sponsors etc. His story is really unique, not good enough for a district three family because he's ugly.. definitely never seen that before. I liked his braveness in killing the peacekeeper but he was also foolish and maybe not to intelligent to believe the other peacekeeper... but overall I think he should do well. Victor material? maybe not but close to. Cathodra, she was kind of your average district 3 tribute but they're always good. She's intelligent and she'll be good at making allies as she seems to get along well with people. Her goodbyes were sad as well, great chapter!
| JabberjayHeart 2/23/13 . chapter 8
Knew I forgot -_-
Cal was brilliant here. I mean, his name is genius, but you turned District Four into something worthy. I've never liked District Four; portrayed as good-looking, great swimmers and fisherman. A surfer, though? That's brilliant. He even sounds one and he's reaped, which I hate, but it hits with the year and his attitude! I literally love the boy so much.
Sawyer, too, was ingenious. I like both Sawyer and Aurora, I just don't know what to think of them together. Her manipulative streak was pretty impressive and she'll probably blend well with Melody - or be at each other's throats. I agree with others; there feels to be more at Sawyer and her relationship with her daddy. It seems almost... dare I say it, but loving beyond that of family members. I don't know. Maybe sexually or abusive or something, I can't put a direct finger on it, but it's there and I think that's why I'm intrigued more by Sawyer than I first though.
You've managed to turn a district I normally hate into something that leaves me enthralled and wanting more ;o well done Chaos, you never cease to amaze me with bringing these characters to life.
My favourite was Sawyer but Cal is close behind. So. Very. Close.
| MyrtleFalls 2/23/13 . chapter 8
I really like both of these tributes! Cal cracks me up, with his stereotypical California-surfer boy attitude, and Sawyer is just something else. She's clever and obviously has a lot of talents. I think she's my favorite so far. I love the way you wrote this chapter, too...well, it's the way you write every chapter! But it's sweet and descriptive and funny at times, and you really capture the spirit of these people very well.
| Foxface5 2/21/13 . chapter 8
Sorry I'm a bit late! I love how dedicated you are with the fast and amazing updates.
Anyway, I normally like careers as they tend to be the tributes with a lot of depth or strong characteristics.
Calder was a bit underwhelming for me as he's just a laid-back and easy going surfer guy which I've read a lot of but he had a distinct voice and you wrote him really well so I do like him, he's cool but I won't be really focused on him.
Sawyer is a bit too manipulative and strategic that she doesn't seem to have much more to her I mean- there should be a strong reason that someone is so sly and so centred around wanting to win but I don't feel it with her.
She's amusing though and I like her in a sort of- I'd love to slap you sort of way XD
Anyway, District Four was an entertaining read and the characters were pretty cool.
I wonder which district's up next!
| nb1998 2/21/13 . chapter 5
Yes these two were very interesting and as always your writing is great.
Shiloh: Nice name and I really liked him. The fact he does art shows he is really creative and I liked the scene where he was drawing the tree on the wall, it was sweet. And it's nice he has such loving parents and I thought he was just a nice normal tribute until the scars were mentioned. I feel sorry for him because one of the boys was even horrible to him after he was reaped.
Visca: That story was so unique and once again touching, it was really well written. It feels that she has no hope and she is also very insecure, I can't see her doing well because of this. She's going to be very nervous and she'll get little sponsors because she won't want to do what the Capitol say. I really like her but she doesn't stand too much of a chance.
| nb1998 2/20/13 . chapter 4
I like the way you have random districts, it's better so we don't have certain districts one after the other. Some more interesting tributes.
Eris: It's quite sad seeing kids like this going into the games. He's like the nicest big brother ever, he seems to be so caring and thoughtful.. he doesn't seem to care what people think of him because he loves his sister and then he just goes and breaks his finger for his friend. He really is quite the loving type but at only thirteen will he do very well?
Kyra: She is nice, just like Eris. She has a large family who support her well, and it was really touching when the little baby, River was sitting there looking at her. I liked the bit about going to the fence, she wants a better future but I don't see her as the rebellious type but she will be determined to get back for her family and friend.
| nb1998 2/20/13 . chapter 3
I liked this district, these tributes were so much different compared to the average district 2 tributes.
Melody: Okay, I was a little confused by her but overall I think she's great. I mean she's a different person completely to who she says she is and I think her manipulation is going to be great. The TV thing at the start was a great idea and I think the relationship with Ebony was great as well. The whole peacekeeper thing was a very good plot.
Andras: I actually didn't realise they were gay until quite close to the end. He's rebellious and I like that because it's not what district two tributes are normally like. He's caring and comforting but I think he can do well. He can stand up for himself and is brave.
These two were very different, I wonder whether they'll join the career pack...
| nb1998 2/20/13 . chapter 2
I thought I'd read this story since I realised how good your writing is from fourteen and your writing is great here as well. So:
Barke: I like that name, it's actually quite original for someone that comes from district seven. Okay, his job is over done and so is the feeling of sadness of having to do the job but I felt like there was a little spin on it as he still had a nice relationship with his friends and his sister and I think it's nice they don't judge him because if what he does.
Alyx: I think she's really unique and if she wants to be she can probably be very manipulative. It was nice seeing two different sides to her but it's sad that the other friends might not come to see her at the reaping because she's rich. I like how she's kind and gives them stuff but the fact she was unhappy about seeing the peacekeeper injured shows she clearly doesn't want to hurt anyone in the games. So I don't know how she'll do.. maybe a bit like foxface.
| Anime'sPrincess 2/19/13 . chapter 8
District four are usually the least vicious careers and usually the more humane ones so I tend to like them.
Sawyer is kind of an exception as she does seem very focusess and ruthless and Calder- well I am not sure if he even will be a career? He probably trained a bit but he did not intend to volunteer so I am not sure about him.
I like how original his name is- Calder McCullin :) It sounds different, it's nice and I like how he goes by Cal, it's very laid back just like him.
His friendship dynamic is very enjoyable and the whole pov was just quite amusing and relaxed. His actions, reactions and words all seemed to reflect on the laid back, ordinary teenager that he is and I liked that.
You wrote him very well and made a character that could have been bland seem very refreshing.
Sawyer's pov was also great as everything she did and thought seemed premediated and well thought out and also reflected on her personality.
When she was thinking of how to position herself best to volunteer and how she used that peacekeeper to her advantage where all clever ideas to show who she is.
I also agree that her relationship with her father is quite odd and very intriguing, I'd like to know more.
I prefered Sawyer as a character as I feel she will be very interesting in the Games setting and a stronger competitor but as a person I am more attatched to and rooting for Calder.
Brilliantly written as always.
| LexisZ-10 2/19/13 . chapter 8
Getting close to the end of the reapings now:) I've enjoyed each one so far but I am seriously excited to see Inez soon :D
At this point I'd say my favorites have been Marlee, Cathodra and Shiloh but I have found each tribute to be unique and a pleasure to read about.
Sawyer was a typical career girl but actually since she is from four she is different as her type of character is usually from 2 or even 1. Her relationship with her dad was peculiar and what made her stand out and of course the bit with the peacekeeper was funny.
I like her last name but not so much her first.
Calder is just a cool and normal guy. I had to laugh every time you had him say 'dude' and 'totally' he's just such a surfer dude.
I have seen his type before but what made him stand out was that he was reaped and had no desire to go to the Games- most of these laid back typed in syots still volunteer and want to go into the Games for some reason which I don't think suits this type of character.
I can't wait for more!
I love his name too.