First of all great job! It was a bit fast paced for my taste. For for the future you might want to add more detail it was a bit confusing with gregors family dying living and dying. When ares came back to life hat was great I'm ashamed that I didn't think of that my self. Great job! Well fly you high...

This story is too quickly pace.
I like how you included more about Ares than most other story's. Most don't even include him in five sentences in their story. This seems more like something suzan Collins would make but with more detail and alot longer chapters.

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I also forgot the cutters are ants they don't use swords they use their mandibles. there is no such thing as an ant king it is a queen. the only Forrest in the underland is the jungle. Why must you bring so many already dead characters back. How could UNDERLAND ants get gregor's OVERLANDER father down to the underland. I am no longer going to read any more it is horrible.

Well, I'm not sure where to start. There boats not ships. The serpents didn't give gregor blood poisoning it made his arm swell up. Gregor's grandmother and father dying that close to each other is unrealistic. And when he fell from the air vent there were tunnels not a cavern leading to regalia. there is no way to get into the palace other then by bat or the lift. Ares explanation was very un realistic he is a bat he cant stitch or bandage because he doesnt have thumbs. I didn't dare read the rest the chapters are too short. You are taking it way too fast. Please re read the books. I am sorry if you take this as an insult but I am honestly stating my opinion. I will make an effort to find time in the next few days to read the rest when I am finished I will once again review about it.

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Pretty good story, but you really need longer chapters.

Yo, make your chapters a lot longer.

Yep, this needs to be slowed down.

There wasn't any picture of Gregor and Ares getting bonded. This seems a little rushed.

you should read the books again there were some time line mistakes serpants didnt attack the boat it was squid or a octopus

Good start