Please add the next chapter soon!

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And here I was, thinking this was romantic. This is a little bit of place, in my view. It's Urashima-san, not han. Still, not a bad concept.

Nice, bit rushed but nice. And i have to agree about Kei thinking about other optionss. i mean Naru beat the HELL out of him one to many times

Hehehe, nice, very nice... :P

Maybe it's just me, but I think it's a little graphic to be PG-13...

heehee, Keitaro in cotton panties!

Kore wa? Oh boy... I thought I was getting a romantic twist... only to get a lemon instead. Haha... better not go to a bar tonight _

Anyways, good effort. It's a little too 'sour' for my taste. Next time be sure to add more of a story and I'm sure you will do fine You have a good use of words, and that is a gift that should be exploited. Keep on writing!

Interesting take. I preferred the way it really happened, but each to their own...