|Reviews for Gregor and the sword of sandwitch|
| jakerisinger 2/7/13 . chapter 2
that is cool plz continue it b the way you have ALOT of spelling mistakes
| PartidgeinaGrape 1/21/13 . chapter 2
No, sorry, Partidgeinagrapetree, this is not one of the better stories on the site.
| Time Lord Flamel 1/20/13 . chapter 2
First, some constructive crit:
I would recommend that you take some time to review your story after you write it. There are some basic mistakes with spelling and capitalization. You can fix that really easily if you just take a few minutes to re-read what you've written and fix it, or you could get a beta-reader. They're just someone who reads your work for you and fixes your mistakes. If you want one, I would be more than happy to beta-read for you.
I also think, because this is fanfiction, you should spend less time describing Gregor and who he is, and more time on how his life is now and how he's changed.
That said, this is one of the better first stories I've seen, especially for this fandom. I am most interested in the premise and plot, and I think you could go far with it.
| Y 1/16/13 . chapter 2
Y do you keep typing i as a?
| Guest 1/16/13 . chapter 2
The premise of this is pretty good and you have some good things like him using the map of his scars to tell his story but you need to work on your grammer (or proof reading... I witch I became the warrior, I don't think the believed my until a showed them Ares claw) and it feels a little rushed.
| woah 1/14/13 . chapter 1
Lotta improvement needed. LOT.