AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW I love this chapter since we got the I love yous, a little smut, and an Alpha Female being announced. I loved this story you did a great job with it since this was all from scratch :) Now onto the sequel SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

Poor John...I just wanna hug him. He's not a creature, he's not a monster but unfortunately he feels that way since the things he done in his past. Joss can, and does love you stupid men lol. They are always overthinking everything, or not thinking enough hahahahahahahahahaha. Go for it John tell her how you fell you flove her :)

EEEP great chapter again and again. I love this story, and I am glad I am catching up so I get hurry up on the sequel before you post a new chapter hahahahahahahahaha.

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW everyone wants them together Alice, Taylor, I mean even Fusco was hinting that John was into her and being Alpha Female! Come on Joss, and John stop being so so so...so them lol. EEEEEP they have to say they want each other next chapter right? I need coffee since I just got up, but I'll be back lol.

Joss he's into you lol poor girl doesn't want to get her hopes up because our favorite lethal hitman/wolf man is so tight lipped about his feelings. Getting him to admit anything takes a lot, and I get where she is coming from but she's got both Fusco, and Dr. Mike whom I like by the way lol telling her. Go for it Joss get yourself your man :)

Did I happen to mention as of late how much I love this story, and your writing its perfection :) :)

hahahahahahaha Lionel is so true :) Don't mess with John's mate, but I love protective John its so caring and tender that he doesn't think he possesses. I can't wait till they profess their feelings to each other I wonder who will do it first Joss, or John? Joss had been thinking about not being able to tell him how she felt, but John saved her life can't live without her so it could be either one of them. Guh I just want to hear I love you from either one right now lol.

Eeeep great chapter again lol.

First off, awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww John has his mate John has his mate lol. Okay now that's out of my system how utterly sad it was for Joss to go through that whole these are my last minutes on earth type feeling it must of been horrible on her, but John saves the day. Taylor was cute too wanting to be turned :) Great chapter and I love this story!

Finally I got a chance to read this :) I was busy yesterday and couldn't even get on :( But yay I love it, and its definitely AU which makes me SQUEE since I love reading AU plots.

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww Joss he loves you too he just won't admit it either...two very strong willed individuals that can't admit to what they are feeling! I love this chapter, and I love how Joss isn't afraid of the wolf people its true to form even if its AU a lot of people are scared of the unknown because its the unknown but not our Joss girl!

Excellent story! I loved it. You described their world beautifully and I could feel the love. Cannot wait to see what you come up with for the sequel!

Perfect line: I want you; I want you in my life, in my home, in my bed. Forever.

I very much enjoyed reading this - looking forward to the sequel!

Perfect description of our favorite girl: Guts and compassion, that was his Joss.

LOL: The life of a quiet housewife was not for Joss, but at least her baby girl could be the Alpha Bitch.

Excellent job with the dialogue!

Favorite lines:
When you are being hunted by every law enforcement agency in the country, a casual date suddenly becomes a logistical nightmare. - details, smetails...

John could stare death in the face without fear, but when confronted by the woman he loved, he had turned tail and run.

This is a pretty good story, as far as AU stories go. After reading, I have realized that, while you definitely have a wonderful twist on the canon world with the Wolves, you need to explain your idea more. Read your story through the eyes of one who has never read it before, and see if you are asking yourself questions such as: What is a Wolf? How does one become a Wolf? What is the "Wolf Code" you speak of? What are the legends and stories behind Wolf people? I think you need to address these questions early into your story. You jump right into "turning as a way to save someone", without explaining how turning works, or even explaining how the injury happened. That would make the scene a lot stronger. On that note, I'm confused as to what the focus of the story is. Is it Dalton? Or is it the Wolves? Or the relationship of John and Carter? You make no explanation for how Joss got hurt, then suddenly that attack becomes the focus of the story. Right before that the focus was on the fact that John is a Wolf. Then the story is all about the relationship. It's ok to focus on all of these aspects, but don't back off and then charge full force; it makes for a confusing story. Same with other details. You mention a Wolf Code, but don't explain what that is, and then never mention it again. It seems very important to the foundation of the story so explain that a bit better. Same with the enhanced senses; you don't really explain it, then it never comes up again. But it seems very important and interesting. Also, the scene in the hospital makes the assumption that the reader knows more than they really do. Why is it so important that John is an Alpha? Why is he an Alpha, and not someone else? Why does that affect Joss' transformation? Questions like these put big holes in your story and need to be addressed. I also think you turned Joss too early in. You could have had many interesting turns of event that lead to the transformation. Consider this as a hypothetical "rewrite": Perhaps, after learning of John's Wolf status, bring the reader through situations in which Joss witnesses the extent of John's abilities as a Wolf, which not only explain how powerful he is as an Alpha, but contrasts Wolves and non-Wolves so we understand them better. During these situations, John explains to Carter how being a Wolf works. Then Joss gets hurt and is turned - say, in a raid gone awry - and becomes a member of the pack. Then don't talk about the turning much anymore (nothing more than minor flashbacks), focus on her life as a Wolf. That's what's interesting now. We understand why she gets turned, and we know what it all entails. Your current story needs some major organizational work, but I love the premise. Overall, I give it a B.

ok, that was a pretty cool story. I dont do the whole supernatural sort of thing, but I had liked your other stories, and thought I would give it a go. Glad I did. It was very very well written and engaging. Thanks.