|Reviews for Strange Persistence|
| Lil'MissChris 1/22/13 . chapter 1
Oh my! I giggled so hard at this. This is OOC, but I suspect you knew that, otherwise it probably wouldn't have been so funny! I particularly lost it at the pouty Luscious... *ahem* Lucius. He's so flirty! And Severus too. My-o-my.
Though there are two things that stood out.
Barty rolled his eyes a lot for such a short word count. Perhaps some other actions might have been better suited, like: eyebrow raising, shrugging, scoffing, or scowling.
Also if it's a muggle club, would Severus and Lucius be throwing galleons at the dancers?
You utilized the prompts well and I never would have known which ones you chose unless you pointed them out up top. That's a very good thing! They were subtly done and you utilized your options nicely. Well done and thank you for entering!