Wow. That was cool. I liked your pacing, especially in regards to the (bracketed? italicized?) // phrases. Very nice internal dialogue. Liked it a lot. Write full length Johnny stories for me, k?

Awwwww!

"I never knew how much Heaven can resemble hell . . .." That line definitely says a lot about the Steven King origins of this show for me.
"Can a man choose his own destiny. Reinvent himself...." That's one of the fascinating aspects of the whole scenario--it's going to be interesting (I hope.)
Nice DD--straight to the heart of things--as usual.