This story is great and I'm absolutely loving it! Your plot and character development is excellent, as is your style. You certainly have a flair! Please update soon - there aren't enough good Swan Princess fanfics anymore!

Love, love, LOVE! You must update soon! The suspense of that cliffhanger is killing me!

I really like this chapter. I liked the old friend, seemingly fathery sort of relationship or bond between Derek and King Jacob. I also liked the way you brought Uberta into the chapter very disheveled. Also adding to the mystery of whether or not the villain is going to reveal himself right away or toy with everyone for his own amusement. And also to see who the key person on the villian's hit list is. Good chapter, keep going :)

I think you are the first or one of the first who actually mentioned Whizzer in your story and didn't just pretend that he didn't exist in the third movie. I absolutely loved the whole festival set up, and especially King Jacob letting loose and tormenting Derek. All in good fun, of course. Although, if they had a card game, Odette would win hands down. This is by far my favorite chapter, so far though. I am sure you have many more to come. Loved it, and can't wait for more :)

I love all of the attention that Derek is showering on his birthday girl, even if she thinks its a little much. It's the thought that counts. I like how you not only show Derek and Odette's relationship evolving, but the relationships that have come before them. I also like the background story that you gave everyone, it really fit in establishing the backstory so that I could understand the real story. And when you are the richest king in the world, the royal treatment will be placed on you at all times. Great chapter and I am looking forward to the next :)

I really love the suspense and character ties that you put into this new villain. And I loved how you mentioned Derek's father and illustrated that even in death, his memory still lives on. I can't wait to see what you do with this new villain. Great job :)