It could use a bit of improvement. Please add some description to the characters and their sorroundings, so viewers can know what they look like and where they're at. You should make chapters longer even if it means taking forever on just one. It might not seem fun, but it will be worth it. As for the storyline so far; The outbreak should have at least taken some time to develop instead of happening so fast. I'd like to continue reading the story, so please continue it.

Please continue : )