|Reviews for As the world crumbles, you're all I see|
| Hobbit69 2/21/13 . chapter 2
So far, so good. Great plot, and I love that you've drugged Sherry so that she can't escape, but must wait for Jake to find her.
| Sherry 2/12/13 . chapter 2
Oh wow! The chase was really well-written and the ending gave me chills! I can't wait for more.
P.S I hate Ashley, but she was definitely in character, she's such a brat x'D
| Sherry 2/12/13 . chapter 1
The drama is so intense and Jake is spot-on, so to say this is amazing is an understatement. I'm on the edge of my seat. Keep it coming!
| Shiary 2/7/13 . chapter 2
O_O this is awsome! I cant wait for more!
| Emil Lime 2/1/13 . chapter 2
There weren't any boring parts, silly! Have more confidence in your writing! This chapter was good, giving me and the other readers more questions to ponder!
As always, your writing was great. The way you describe things is simply fantastic! The chase scene was good, not long and drawn out where we'd be going "we get it already". I thought the pacing of this chapter was also really good, getting us to meet Ashley and Leon by the end.
I'm super curious as to why Ashley of all people is there but I suppose that will come out in due time. For now, it good that Leon's showed up. I get he feeling Jake would have pretty much left her behind once he made sure Ashley didn't know anything about Sherry.
I loved the part where Jake is shouting at Ashley and you put that to Jake, it was a pretty calm and respectable reaction, that he was even a little proud of how he'd responded. That made me smile. I was sitting here like, "well, it DEFINITELY could have been worse, Jake." Also the little thing where Ashley's says "that's a cool name" as if that will start some kind of meaningful conversation. That brought a smile to my face as well.
Great characterization of Jake once again, and from the little I've seen of Ashley and Leon, they seem in character as well. Except Leon having sweaty bangs, that's impossible. His hair is , I'm just joking. Thank you for including that bit about his hair being sweaty. Through every game with Leon in it that I've played, I'm just like, "WHY IS YOUR HAIR SO GODDAMN GORGEOUS! JUST GET AN F***ING SPLIT END OR SOMETHING! I MEAN, YOUR KILL ZOMBIES FOR CHRIST'S SAKE, NOT ENTERING A BEAUTY PAGENT!" So thank you for that. That made my day : )
As for the little ending part, I am terribly curious! I want to know who the golden eyed person is as well as know what's up with Sherry!
So update really soon!
| Guest 1/31/13 . chapter 2
AHHHHHHHHHH! NOT ASHLEY! Now she's going to be stocking Leon for the rest of the story. And HOLY BA'JEZUUS SHERRY'S BEING MIND CONTROLLED. Well now that I've got that off my chest I must congratulate you on the other well done chapter. I particularly like the way do you describe things.
| KitKatWondaland 1/31/13 . chapter 1
Awesome story so far. Hope you keep up the good work I really like it.
| CoolCat0720 1/31/13 . chapter 2
Plz dear god no mind controling! I hate that shit it just puts too much emotional stress on me!
| CoolCat0720 1/31/13 . chapter 1
Plz, PLzzzzzz jus for a few seconds, he can go insane! Its a side I would very much like to see becuz i get the feeling he would be an unstoppable bad ass
| kunfupandalover 1/31/13 . chapter 2
Cool man update soon!
| LeleB123 1/29/13 . chapter 1
What do u mean not the best... THIS. IS. AWESOME:D
| Annie 1/28/13 . chapter 1
I really like the way you write, i'm looking forward for the next chapter :)
| GothicPrincess22 1/28/13 . chapter 1
I can't wait to read more. Please update soon.
| KellyKelly01 1/28/13 . chapter 1
you are doing great I'm already hooked on this story. please update soon I love this
| Angel la chica de luz 1/28/13 . chapter 1
hello... this is a great story... sorry, i speak spanish, my english is so bad... but, please update soon... i want more... i love RE... YOU ARE A GOOD WRITER... You speak spanish?