Funny chapter. Chazz you should know not to try and hit a girl.

Finally! I haven't read the first chapter in so long that I had to reread it! Next time, please do not take so long, but it was a good chapter. Hurry and update!

Good chapter and you're back after 3 months.

Awesome chapter. Well written. Enjoyed the build up in this chapter. The new characters are interesting. Looking forward to their first date.

Great chapter, looking forward to the next one. Keep up the good work.

This is a good story. Please continue. Jaden and Alexis forever.

Really good first chapter. Would like to see more of their relationship. Keep up the good work.

Some strong advice: Juudai and Asuka (or Jaden and Alexis) are not the kind of pairing that gets together with an "I love you, I love you too." They need a *lot* of build up and a *lot* of characterization and the most important factors about both of them (Asuka prefers being independent to being someone's girlfriend, Juudai is the incarnation of the Gentle Darkness and has/will have Yubel in his soul by his own will and desire) should be addressed to *truly* make the story work. Eliminating any of that in favor of 'shipping is a very bad idea. It weakens and cheapens the characters and the story itself, by removing plausible and necessary obstacles to their characterization.

Also, Juudai isn't going to start bawling because of anyone skipping meals. He'd be more likely to ask if he could have it instead.

And just a note: New Domino City isn't going to exist until the time of 5Ds. And a class trip that's not for the whole class? I am not entirely sure of how much sense that makes. It reads more like a plot device than anything plausible and plot devices should *be* plausible.

Which season is this supposed to be in, anyway? If it's first (presuming because of Momoe and Junko squealing about Ryou), then...well, everything I said above about Juudai and Asuka applies even harder.

i love youre story ! please update soon :)

You spelled Obelisk wrong. Make sure you correct this.

Other than that, update soon please!