I love this story!
I neeeeeed mooooorre!
Please update as soon as you can.

Ahh...

I believe that you should definitley write out a plot line before you start stories. It makes it easier to write and typically your stories would be better.

Most everything I said in my last review still holds true for this one...

This is kind of unrealistic... I mean... they wouldn't just accept a homeless girl.

BUT! ALL stories on this section are 100% UNREALISTIC when it involves a fan getting with a Beatles. Whether they're from this time, or are a girl looking for a new home in their time.

It's just so recycled... :(

ALSO! I think you should change the summary to something better, not everyone needs to or wants to know your name or your age.

I suggest;

Trinity. A young girl, looking for a new home as she lost her only one. All her hopes had been dashed of ever finding a loving family like the one she once had...until she met Ringo Starr. He takes her in under his wing, along with the other Beatles. Through her healing and nurturing they are there with her every step of the way. Maybe, she no longer needs to search for a new home...

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Honestly, that summary I just gave you was pretty poor. But! I wanted you to imrpovise it, a good way to write a story is to write one you would want to read :)

-Crazy

Wow.

OHMIGOSH.

This...is...just...so...freaky.

Haha, my name is Trinity and I wrote my first Beatle story when I was 12 about meeting John... Gah! This is so weird for me : I just turned 13 last year...

Not in a bad way, but still quite freaky...

Is your name really Trinity.

I deleted my story though because I thought it was trash. I wish someone had given me the advice that I could have used, but as unaware as to what it was.

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Personally, I think this story would be more entertaining if you included more emotion into it. As well as more detail, perhaps in their immediate surroundings, and the looks of the characters. Also, it could have been longer :)

Besides that, I enjoyed this.

Even if it freaked me out...

You're Welcome! You gave me a similir idea, but sice I don't know what's gonna happen in this I think there different enough...John's kinda rude, but I still can't wait to see what happens next! {D

That's probably the best idea ever. I love how Richie was the one to find her. So cute...Update soon! {)

Sorreeeeee but it won't be up until tomorrow guys!