Ooh, This is pretty good. I hope next time around I'll have something a little more constructive to say, but so far, so good.

A Saten x Miho fic? On *my* Fanfiction?

It's apparently more likely than I think, and I couldn't be happier about it! Great reading so far, please keep going :3

Well-written yuri story about a pairing other than Kuroko/Mikoto - double win. I'm loving this story so far. Badass Saten is badass, and who knew Jufuku had this much on the ball? Awaiting chapter 3!

Glad to see you back. And in a completely different venue. I love the Academy City universe and your entry is to your usual standards (i.e. excellent). Taking a side character like Miho and bringing her to center stage is right in line with what you do (You, who gave Suzuki Jun an actual character).

I like Saten with Uiharu but this works nicely as well. And they DO have a history. So far it's shaping up to be a good GC story... Promising sweet fluff and a good story to boot.

I'm following this one too. Glad you are still in the game. Anything by Genki Collective always brightens my day.

peacepeace,

'momo

Genki-chan I'm so glad you're still alive! I loved this chapter, I still have no idea what Saten's power is, but I like where this story is going! Juufuku and Saten's little speech was priceless, two teenagers frightening a grown man. I loved this part even more because of the music I was listening to at the time (Teenagers-My Chemical Romance), the song fits perfectly to the speech.

ANYWAYS... I can't think of anything to say except I look forests to the date!

As always, good luck with the writing Genki-chan, and many thanks to Mamu-chan for beta!

When I got the alert for this I was so excited! Finally, an update after two months!

One thing that other reviewers have missed is the nuanced characterization of Miho in this chapter. She’s so much more than simply “cute” here. You show us brief glimpses of the Miho we saw in the first chapter, who shuns recognition for her efforts, and refuses to admit she’s any sort of hero, preferring to deflect that sort of praise to Ruiko. She really is Moon to Ruiko’s Sun in that respect. No matter how much self-deprecation she engages in, the fact remains that in her own way she’s every bit as heroic as Ruiko is. It sure took guts to lead Ruiko against those guys, and to have the presence of mind to protect her, even though Ruiko is supposed to be the one who protects Miho, at least as I understand your intent from the first chapter.

We only see Ruiko from Miho’s perspective. Of course, a girl in love is going to interpret the actions of her beloved a certain way. I’m looking forward to seeing the view of their friendship, and possible relationship, through Ruiko’s eyes. Does Miho really have a chance with her? I guess we’ll find out, won’t we?

Well done as always, Genki!

Congratulations, you got me to break precedent. Usually, I only bother reviewing bad fiction, but this time is the exception, because I really enjoyed Kannazuki no Miko, and decided I would take you up on your challenge.

The manga that Jufuku draws inspiration from is obviously Kannazuki no Miko in disguise. Himeko/Saten is Sun, and Chikane/Jufuku is Moon. That part was easy. The harder part was picking up on the names Souma and Tsubasa. Wouldn't have gotten it if I didn't remember that Souma is the main male character in Kannazuki. A quick Wikipedia check shows Tsubasa is a major supporting character. Those are the only references I can find. Do I win?

Since I've got a review window open I might as well use it for its intended purpose. I'm loving this story so far, even more than your K-On writing. It was well worth the wait of two months for an update just to read the part where Saten kicks ass. I really like where you're going with the yuri in this, too.

My only detailed comment is that I don't understand what some of the other reviewers are saying about dialog flow. Assuming we're reading the same story, I see no problems with it at all. It makes me wonder what these people think the word "forced" means. (Insert Inigo Montoya jpg here.)

SoM

Now this was a really nice treat!

DATE. HORYSHT. I wish I can time travel so I'd just jump to the day in the future when you'd post the next update and come back to the present. Miho is adorable being completely smitten with Ruiko and Ruiko is just badass. Loved how that fight scene was written! I have affinity for people who kick ass because I have absolutely zero fighting skills, so can I marry Ruiko now, please? No? Fine, fine. Okay, she's Miho's. Can I get more fight scenes featuring her badassery instead, please?

Anyway, as it was pointed out by other reviewers, I thought that some of the dialogue felt a little forced.

But all in all, let me assure you that it was DEFINITELY worth the wait. I'll be impatiently waiting for your next update!

*thinks back to the times he's done heavy bag work with his ASP Talon baton*

Yeah, that guy's going to be sore in the morning...he had it coming though.

Gah, I can sympathize with Saten, I'm terrible with remembering anniversaries, although it's butchering the etymology of anniversary in the first place to divide it smaller than a year. SIlly Miho.

No complaints about the baton work, it's straightforward enough. Although starting with a face strike...Saten is far bolder than I would be.

A DATE?! Please, whatever benevolent being in heaven is listening, lift the writer's block for the sake of yuri love. The antics of such would be a highlight of my month when it goes up.

My only issue with this chapter is the gloating in front of Tsubasa. It's wholly unprofessional and feels the slightest bit forced, but that's what makes the buddy cop schtick work in a lot of movies. What bothers me is that I expected them to receive some form of reprimand for it from any Antiskill nearby. Unless the Antiskill supervising knew and respected Saten or Miho. Even then, maybe a cursory and halfhearted "Hey you two, knock it off!".

An update that made my day (and it's only 02:16am).

Some references to Uiharu and Kuroko, I bet those two have come a long way.

The knife de-arming, no actually, the entire conflict was utterly realistic. I would assume you study some form of combat? Perhaps a taijutsu based martial art? But it begs the question; since when has Saten been training in such techniques? Three seconds from attack to ground is a good time, and that kind of confidence against a knife too.

I think those two were somewhat unprofessional with all that provocation and talking while he was cuffed. They might regret that.

There is one point that I think could do with a fair bit of improvement; the conversation between the gangsters felt like and info-force-feed starting about here; "You'll never be a full member of Retribution".
I can see that fitting all that in naturally would take some serious story re-arranging, so it can be overlooked, but it's something to work on.

Greatly anticipating the next chapter.

I was seriously happy to see this updated! Miho is too darn cute with her feelings. Saten is a badass. We got more threats on our plate to look forward to/fear. Saten may have a thing for little Miho as well, maybe maybe! Things are looking up, and I assure you it was worth the wait. I like it. I likes it a lot!

Hehe, now THAT was a nice little chapter you put up. There really is nothing I can say about it. I mean, the way you wrote the action scene here was pretty good.

Better than how I write mine anyway.

Anyway, I never expected this pairing to be made at all. Personally, I don't ship Saten with Uiharu. I actually ship her with, can you believe it, Mikoto.

Heh, well that's me. This pairing seem to work quite well too. The way you've written it proves to be the case.

And again, not much I can say about this. I look forward to more chapters in the future. Stay lively and inspired!

excellent beginning, and the novel pairing is a nice change from the usual. can't wait to see where you're going with this.

Like it? I love it!

I'm loss for words, to be frank. I love the pairing! I love the way you portrayed it! Immediately after that episode in Railgun series, I kinda knew this two have something going on. (UiharuxRuiko is possible too..)

The telepathy is a nice touch BTW. Got me smirking like a barnacle.

Not much for me to say, I'm literally overwhelmed on all aspect when I read this this.

You have my support, Genki-senpai. :D

A very good start. The degree to which you have withheld 28 months worth of background development feels just right.

So I guess Saten developed a tase for action and found something to strive for..? I guess I'll find out in due course, keep it up.