| Reviews for The Phantom of New York |
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newbornphanatic 3/29/13 . chapter 3 ooooohhhh sounds like erik is crushing! anyway i'm going to have to say i read it and i like it! UPDATE SOON! |
zoe 3/20/13 . chapter 3 Wow that was great! Thanks so much, I'm really enjoying the story. Looking forward to the next chapter. |
Phanatic01 3/19/13 . chapter 3Yes, it was short. No, it wasn't bad. Yes, it was good:) I liked Erik and Christine's meeting and I hope that you'll continue to want to write this!:) update soon please. |
Aguna 3/18/13 . chapter 3Interessting so far :) |
Millin 3/18/13 . chapter 3 Direct quotes annoy me, especially Think of Me, which has been used about 10,000 times! And yes, it was far too short! |
emeraldphan 3/18/13 . chapter 3This isn't bad. You've set up the first meeting of Erik and Christine very well, with Erik being indifferent rather than infatuated straight away. There's also elements of the musical incorporated into the chapter, not just with Think of Me but the idea of Christine taking someone's place and doing it successfully. Not bad at all. |
TheWitheredRose 2/18/13 . chapter 2I'm excited to see what will become of this story. I like the modern twist. Please do keep writing! |
emeraldphan 2/18/13 . chapter 2Another good chapter! You've continued to set the scene really well, with nice insights into Erik's perfectionism and the friendship between Christine and Meg. A funny and light hearted chapter, despite Erik, but things could change of course... And thank you for reading my story! |
TheShadowSoul 2/18/13 . chapter 2 Your chapter was so abrupt. You said it would take another two weeks to post it if you make it larger. I can tell you, most people prefer a 3 weeks update that has a very good chapter, and with good chapter I mean that it is large, that something actually happens, not just a filler. That has good grammar and spelling and that is accurate. If you are going to make us wait like 2 weeks or more and post this little thing, your story won't become famous and it will be boring. I recommend that you write the story in a piece of paper, then, when you have the time go and write it in a computer. I'm just giving you tips, i'm not trying to offend you or something like that. I hope you are okay, -M.D |
PrimrosesInTheRain 2/18/13 . chapter 2I'm really liking where you're going with this story! I hope you continue it :) |
Phanatic01 2/18/13 . chapter 2Again, this chapter is very flowing and the characterisations are great so far! I think there was suppose to be a break between the lines ' "See he knows what he's doing." ' and ' "Meg if you make me try on one more dress..." ' - but other than that great layout of the scenes. |
Phanatic01 2/18/13 . chapter 1THIS is why I should read more modern day fanfics - I don't read those as much as I would like to but here I am reading and reviewing this! I think that this is a great start to this story, it's well written, very flowing and placed into nice little sections. I like the little traits you added to the characters to make them seem more believable, e.g. 'Christine held her breath. Please don't ask. She thought clutching her hands behind her back. Please don't ask about him.' (I really liked that part!) I also would find it really cool to be your beta for this story:) ...Anyway, it's time for me to read the next chapter! |
emeraldphan 2/4/13 . chapter 1I've just discovered this and it sounds like it could be an interesting story. I love modern stories and I'm looking forward to seeing how you fit the characters into a modern setting. Please continue soon! |
bwayphantomrose 2/2/13 . chapter 1Because I like your writing style, I wanted to give you some advice that might draw more people to your story. When you quote characters, it is much easier on the eyes to read when it flows correctly. Let me show you. Your line: "What time?" She asked attempting to fit the key into the lock. should be "What time?" she asked, attempting to fit the key into the lock. The character after the quotes should always be lowercase, and the dialogue word (ex: said, replied, asked) should generally have a comma after it. I say this because I find stories with these sorts of simple grammatical errors have fewer readers, and I would love for you to generate more interest in this story. |
TheMaskedSoul 2/1/13 . chapter 1Hello. I see you are new in this... Well, not that 'new'. I visites your profile and I saw that you have a few stories of Phantom, mostly One Shots. I must say this chapter is quite good, you really should continue writing this story. I would like very much to see where this goes, You have a pretty good writing skill and I have a presumption that this story is going to be pretty good... And for the Beta thing.. I think I could help you. Contact me if you wish. -D. |