|Reviews for legacy of the hero|
| Higuchimon 2/1/13 . chapter 1
1. Author notes in the middle of writing are a very bad idea. It jerks the reader out of the story and is like the author screaming in the reader's face. Use WORDS to describe things, instead of "it's like this other thing!"
2. So, it's raining badly enough to stop a tournament but Our Hero can still check out the rising sun? SERIOUSLY? Shouldn't this weather have been mentioned beforehand?
3. Why can't he get a hotel room? That's something he should've arranged before coming for a tournament anyway. He doesn't read as very professional to me. And he should have a manager if he is a pro. That's part of what a manager does.