Please Note: I am completely fandom blind here. Never having even heard of this Manga/Anime. But I hope you'll be pleased with the review none the less :)

-It's so awesome that you've chosen to tell this in the second person- a device I rarely see, in fanfiction, but also even more rarely done well.

-You have a very well developed writing style to a high degree of complexity.

-You are extremely good at vivid imagery, It helped me see the characters in my head, as I've never even heard of this like I stated before.

-Beautifully well done! It just goes to show QUALITY OVER QUNANITY! Any day is always best .

Love, Riku

It's interesting that you've chosen to tell this in the second person- a device I rarely see, especially in fanfic. It works very well for you here, though, and you have a sophisticated writing style and some extremely vivid imagery. Well done x

Oh. My. Goodness.

This is so unbelievably heart-wrenching...but still so good! I love it
Please write more! Looking forward to read more stories from you :)

When you told me this story was inspired by something I wrote I just had to check it out. And wow, just colour me impressed. Truth be told, I read this story yesterday but I just had to keep turning it over in my mind before I could muster up a review for this. I also decided to read the light novel to get some further insight into this, since I'm only familiar with the anime of Accel World.

I love the insight to the characters you showed here. There's an emotional connection here that I felt was missing from the anime. And the whole story just came across as really intense and passionate. Whenever you used short sentences, it came across as really terse - I could really feel the urgency in the situation. And then in the end, as the sentences got longer and more emotional, it just... ugh. Can't stop the feels.

No lies, am putting this on my faves.