Ahgrgh...
Sucked
Sucked bad. But what can you do?
Its a self insertion. I have never read a good one.
I think ill try to write one sometime.

I have an I idea that may improve the storyline.

Kill the comedy. Its not working well.
Add some ultra painful expriance that leaves jamie crippled for the rest of the story aka blindness.
Rewrite the 1st two chaps.
Put feeling into it.

Write from the heart.

thats too funny. she's more afraid of her mother then she is afraid of ivo robotnick holding a gun up to her head threatening to kill her. yea, like that actually happen in reality but then again stories or not all stories were meant to make much sence. do you agree with me. and hey man start chapter 3 will ya'. what happened when jaime's mother came. what happened!

that was originally funny. that girl didn't care about nothing and how i wish i had a parakeet that sang the twilight zone theme. hey i wish i had a parakeet. great chapter and sorry for getting off topic.

*busts up laughing* This is great! I love it! Write the next chapter, I'm looking forward to reading it. Please? Oh pretty please? *slaps self for starting to beg* Sorry, I don't want to sound like a pathetic moron. Keep writing though.

Dude, do you feel that way at 3 in the morning, too? ~falls to her knees dramatically~ I AM NOT ALONE!
~ahem~ or something. Anyway, very funny story thus far! I can't stop laughing at it! ^_^

O_O Ah! Mothers! Run!

*LOL* Definitally getting better! Can't wait for the next chapter!

And now I'm going to go off and figure out exactly WHY I can't seem to spell today.

Heh. I liked this. 'Twas funny.

It would be sort of interesting, though, to know how Robotnik got inside her house.

Well, all I can say is: it has potential. If you do it right, it could be great, or it could suck to high hell. Anyway, once again, I shall remind you: NEVER APOLOGIZE.