I don't know if I've said it, but I love the way you did Fury. Too bad you can't get them to be mean on the games. (Least I can't.) And how do you pronounce Umbra? I can't seem to get it straightened out.
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Hey, it's HoneyB from deviantart.

Personally I don't see anything wrong with this story, but I guess it's up to you (I'm on a 4th version of a still unfinished story!).

Awesome job, like the way you explained how Shade and Rockchick met (did you draw a comic for this?) and all of the facts about Rockchick/Umbra. I guess I was right when I said she looked like Shadow!

Good story.I liked reading it.Ja.