What the person above me said.

It seems like it could be an awesome story, but there are so many grammatical errors, I can't get through it.

Just find someone to Beta it, and you will be all set! :D

Great one-fic and I enjoyed the plot you brought into your story. _

This was great!

(Your possessive/owning, as in "your hat", meaning that it is owned by one specific person and no one else. You're you are. as in "you're a writer" or "you're a Hobbit")

I like it!

Good fic!

I feel like this had the potential to be an awesome fic but there are so many grammatical errors and it missing words that it took away from the story. Keep on writing but I would recommend a beta next time.