Hello, I love your first chapter. Keep up the good work. Sometimes in my life, when I write storys, I sometimes think something that happen in the past then write it down. For you. you love to write your stories, and that's what I what to hear.

-crystal star

I think you did a great job on this! Very intreging I wanna know what happens next.

Oh, I very much like this; especially the line, "Things that go /suck/ in the night". Please continue.

Hay this is written really well.0-oI like it well done.

Could you maybe read and review my origonal vampire novel?I would really apricte it if you could.

Thanks.

And keep writing.

Please write more soon. This is a wonderful story. I really love it.

Nice beginning. _ ...okay, I'll bite: why did the demi-goddess leave the ring trapping Larva lying around just waiting for someone to find it?