|Reviews for The Alterran|
| clexfan 5/5/13 . chapter 6
Seriously, this story is frickin' awesome! :-)
| thesagerk 4/28/13 . chapter 6
bloody brilliant! I hope there is more on the way...
| Wulffe 4/21/13 . chapter 6
Very good story so far ..
Not your typical HP/SG crossover .. but I like it just the same ..
| Jfitzgerald 4/11/13 . chapter 6
Please update again soon. thanks.
| Whatever 4/9/13 . chapter 6
"I assume you will great her with us?" -greet not great
Hermione's ship landed in -this begins one long run-on sentence
The ship itself was a work of art, - this begins another long run-on sentence
Out from the center spire were three dock - this begins another long run-on sentence and first you call them dock extensions and then later you call them engine extensions.
The other two dock extensions - another long run-on
Seamus has been pranking everyone more, Neville had been studying his plants more often - comma splice, use a semi-colon and should be Neville has
but seems was more of a traps and explosives expert - but it seemed; also a comma splice
'Well we'll see I hope they can.' - another run-on
'Alerio, just so you know I believe Neville will be hear in around a month in a gate ship though, as he will be using some of the rooms on my ship. -here not hear
Colonel Jack O'Neill their leader of SG-1 - should be the leader
'She's almost the same as Lanshea if I didn't know our ships couldn't replicate I would say she was Lanshea's daughter.' Hermione chuckled in her head ' she's quite the mother hen'. - another run-on, also use a comman after daughter and head.
Alerio sent her the equivalent of a eye role. -roll not role
Unsurprisingly all who were watching turned to look at Daniel. Who nervously pushed up his glasses. "We'll by the look of them I'd say that Hermione is a Bastet and Alerio a Pheonix." -, but a comman before who, and should be phoenix
| Penny is wise 4/8/13 . chapter 6
| freethewolves1 4/5/13 . chapter 6
great story and i really hope you update it soon.
| jabbarulez 4/5/13 . chapter 6
and the plot thickens! are the british wizards going to be all OC? or will they be a mixture?
| starboy454 4/5/13 . chapter 6
| Ryaaaaann 4/5/13 . chapter 6
Great chapter! Great description of the mini city ship haha. What are you planning to do with Ron? is he even going to be in the story? because i really hate him lol
| mattblue 4/5/13 . chapter 6
| god of all 4/5/13 . chapter 6
Grreat chapter story so far please continue this story soon
| Light Lord Cybergate 4/5/13 . chapter 6
Em...just one thing...
Since Harry is going undercover ... if he goes to hogwarts...(Wouldn't be surprised as most stories do) who will his classmates be?...Hermione, Neville, Seamus etc are all Alterans...
Seems to me Hogwarts will be filled with a lot of OC's
That is if he goes to the school (very over done)
I think it would be far better if he went as an adult wizard instead of a Hogwarts student.
| freethewolves1 4/3/13 . chapter 5
cool i hope you update it soon.
| Blackholelord 4/2/13 . chapter 5
Well this looks nice. It looks more of Stargate story, then an actually crossover.