This was really a great story, I enjoyed it very much. The structure was a little cluttered, but it was readable after a second glance. The flow of the story as a whole seemed almost exactly like the flow in the books, and the ending was just right for this kind of story.

The characterization was excellent, especially Makuta's. Hali and Jaller's interactions were the most heartwarming to me.

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Woo Hoo! That was a great story! Good Job!

Great Fic! I enjoyed it greatly, and thought it well done.

Good Job!

You have taken one of my favorite underdeveloped characters and made a masterpiece with him. Seriously. Your characterization of Alt-Teridax is just perfect, and this is a fantastic little story. Keep up the good work!