Oh man genovesians *raises eyebrow* I think

Naaa it's okay ! My titles get pretty random too! Crowley seemed fine... My main problem is your lack of page breaks... It kinda makes it hard to read . Update soon !

This seems interesting GILAN! Yes this fandom needs more of him by the way gilan is spelled with 1 l

Hmmm The chapter needs more descriptions and there's a new paragraph every time someone new talks so... I think that's what you need to work on. So far the characters were kinda in character, you just need to fix a few things here and , It'd be great if you update!

Please update its really good

I know I am being technical but when you are writing from a third person point of view you don't have to say pov, just so you know. I can't wait to see where this is headed!

Hmm you need a bit work in narration and fixing some of your spelling but good job so far just make longer chapters too

What's going to happen? Curiosity is going to kill me so update! (Please:))

It was too short... That's my only issue. I think it could have been longer and a lot more could've happened so the reader will be able to know at least a bit of what to expect in the later chapters... Please update though!