Wow.. great story, Adam! High drama for Jon for sure! A bit rushed, but a good storyline. :) I enjoy JonDrama.

Great story! I enjoyed reading it!

Adam, I, too, liked the premiss and agree with DebR that the pacing is fast. One reason is there are no visual breaks, as in paragraphs and indetions, so the reader has no unconscious cues that the action is changing.
You have the making of several chapters here if you take each indicent and expand it. That way poor Jon is still battered and bruised, but it is a little more gradual and gives us, the reader, time to feel really badly for/with him. I liked this. Keep writing!

This is a nice premise and one that was used several times in the original series. You might want to slow down the pacing a little and develop the character of Ray Taylor more. As it is, the reader doesn't know what Baker did to warrant Taylor's hatred. Maybe a flashback scene at the beginning would help us to understand what's going on.

On the plus side, I really like Ponch's response when Getraer wants to talk to him after Briefing. That's very much in character! :-)