|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Siren's Song|
| hey 11/27/08 . chapter 1
hey, i know why potter's scar's hurting!
it's actually a mary-sue detection device?
| cool-people-suck 2/6/07 . chapter 1
At least u admited it was AU.
| cool-people-suck 2/6/07 . chapter 9
Very un-Harry Potter like
I think this story could have been a little better with out the random Britney spears lyircs...
i also suck at spelling an grammer an stuff so i'm not going to pick on you for that. i feel your pain. but do you at least re read over your work? and get rid of the random capitals?
o yes.. the author of Harry Potter is JK Rowling. no JK Rowlings...
| LadyLapisLazuli 1/8/07 . chapter 3
Oh wow. Congratulations! You invented two new houses! Slytherien and Slytheriren. It's Slytherin, dearie. And you've made up a whole new language as well! What exactly is the meaning of 'manyt cathching'? I'm very interested to know. Is it a botanical term, or a new flavour of ice-cream perhaps? Or maybe you were too lazy to bother spell-checking. Also, you mentiond Ron's 'cute'. Ron's cute what? It's 'you're', not 'your'.
I'm sorry to have to be so frank, but Veronica is one of the worst Mary-Sues ever. And do you actually think Britney Spears is cool? Even my eight-year-old sister doesn't listen to Britney Spears. Well, perhaps she was cool five years ago or so, but not any more. Honey, you're just making yourself a laughing stock.
Ever heard of a full stop? They can be found at the end of most grammatically correct sentences. I don't flame normally, but you should probably try to learn to speak English before you decide to write in it. If it's your second language, you're doing ok. If not, I'm very worried about your education.
You mentioned in your bio that you'll 'flame back if necessary'. Oh, intimidating. I'm so scared! Come on, flame me back if you feel it will make any difference. I really don't care if you do. Even though you say you accept constructive criticism, you say you don't accept flames. That immediately made me realise that you wouldn't like any criticism I gave you, so I didn't see the point in being nice about this.
I'm also reporting you for using song lyrics in your story.
| Murtagh Strikes Back 12/30/06 . chapter 9
Oh god. That was bad. Not just a little bad either. Shockingly, torturously god-awful. Have you ever heard of canon? Heck, have you even read the books? I admit, I only skimmed most of it, because it was too bad to be read thoroughly. The only reason I looked at it in the first place was because I read a PPC of it and was curious. Veronica was one of the worst Mary-Sues I've come across. She's so bad it's funny. Sorry to be harsh, but after I got over the initial shock, I was reduced to uncontrollable giggles by the sheer absurdity of this fic. I mean, when has Dumbledore ever held a ball for a new student? That alone was ridiculous.
Also, your grammar and spelling were atrocious. You know about all those rules in writing, the ones that make your story legible? What makes you think you're exemt from those rules?
Incidentally, there is no such person as Angelina Bell. There's Angelina Johnson, and Katie Bell, but no Angelina Bell.
Usually I never flame, but I'm afraid in your case I've had to make an exception. I'm not trying to attack you, just your story. For god's sake, take it down if you want to avoid further embarrassment to yourself. This story is just nauseating and completely unrealistic, not to mention very poorly written.
Also, I was rather amused by your threat about 'flaming back if necessary' (and you even spelt necessary wrong). Honey, that sort of comment is only going to attract flamers. All the people out there who enjoy baiting authors will say to themselves, 'Great! Let's see if we can get her to retaliate!' That's not what I'm doing here, by the way. I wouldn't flame your story if there weren't good reason for it. But if you feel so inclined, feel perfectly free to flame me right back. I can always use a good laugh, such as your fic has provided me with.
Oh, and one final thing; you aren't allowed to use song lyrics in your stories. If you read the TOS, I'm sure you'll find it clearly stated there. So, I'm reporting you. See you around.
| pokenerd56 1/29/04 . chapter 1
This practically SCREAMS Mary Sue. Hmpf!
Look here. 1)Harry likes CHO, not Hermione.
2) Ginny would NOT like Malfoy because Malfoy DESPISES Muggle-lovers and
3)Your Veronica does seem perfect, hmm?
Well, you could improve your spelling, your characters (stick to the canon!) and, well, please give a noticeable flaw to Veronica Mary Sue! *Curses*
| sally 7/23/03 . chapter 9
Great story! Keep it up!
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 8
Malfoy... Infectious rage... Bood bath... Agonizing demise...
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 7
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 6
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 5
Screams of the Damned!
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 4
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 3
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 2
Still good, but must you capitalize so much?
| Tofu572 3/25/03 . chapter 1