Oh, Artemis is so ruthless! I like it *evil cackle* And it has been OVER 5 months since you last updated!!

Oh dear...

Well, I done in this section now, that's just convinced me I think. This is an excellent piece of fiction. Your descriptive powers are amazing; I am truly in awe of your talent. This plot is surprisingly original, considering an original piece of fan fiction is a rare find. Please continue to post as this one of the best fics in this section.

You know, I thought I was an OK writer. That was until I met Blue Yeti and Kitty Rainbow. Then I read this. And guess what? All three of you make me look like crap. It is now a scientifically proven fact.

I only have one small criticism to make. You used the word ‘technophobe’. Until now I had never heard of that word, but then English is my second language. Is it even a word? Maybe, just maybe, would ‘luddite’ be an acceptable replacement? *meekness* You never know……

As for the story, this is one of the best things that I have read on AF, everything about it is strikingly original. Your plot, your characterisation, your style, it all merges into a gigantic, multi-coloured whirl which is dizzyingly spinning around my imagination. I love it. And it goes on my favourites list…^^

Magna ** laude, Ophelia

Yes. Hopefully, because I shall launch mass pokage at you if it takes five more months to write the next chapter. Something to note, this is absolutely brilliant! It's easy to follow, and it flows very nicely--I've always loved the way you use continuative verbs--and the vivid colour really prevails.

And this last chapter, it was psuedo-film noir! Which you know I absolutely adore. *glomps* YAY for Skye, non?

Great story! Yeah, I hope you don't take 5 months to finish the next chapter. or any other chapter at that. Oh, how old is Arty in your story? It's kinda hard to picture him if I don't know his age. Anyways, keep up the great work! I'll wait for the next chapter and I hope my patience doesn't run dry... Hehe...

I know this is going to be a very dodgy review, Skye, since I've already told you all this, but I thought I'd copy and paste it into a review so that you'd have 25. Don't you feel special?

As you know I found 2 things which proved that you are a member of the human race and not some freaky, anime Godess. And there's not much to say about your style. It's not the best way to go about a story in this fandom, but you wouldn't really want to appeal to the audience as your first priority really, given how you should write the best you can, not changing your style, nature or priorities in a desire to be popular.

You always give a lot of little details (which gives your story a lot of quality and authenticism - and I know I just made up that word...). The detail really builds up the story, and it gives it depth and intregue that you really can't see all that often in fics. I do have a secret love for insane, crimelord Arty (even though I say I don't and I'll denie ever typing this) and you really can pull it off fantastically. One point might be to rehighlight some things which people might not remember from previous chapters (given how long it took to get this one out... *elbowintheribs*) - that'll mean that less people are confused, more suspense is created with the unresolved issues from the previous chapters (such as who did and didn't die in the attack (you haven't revealed that and I've forgotten, have you?) - you should bring it up occasionally so that readers remember it and are interested).

Appart from the issue of trying to keep the suspense going for our little MSite readers (some of whom have attention spans so short they're measured in nano seconds, sorry, sueseconds) I can't find anything wrong. And I can't find anything which I don't fundamentally like. WHich is bloody rare really.

For anyone looking at reviews to find good fics, this one is fantastic. And rather believable given the state of Artemis's morals and issues at the end of TEC. It was believable before as well, but... Skye is definitely the only one writing anything like this in this little fandom. And it's a great read.

There, did i give you enough advertising, Skye? Even though you didn't ask for it. (EVeryone, I didn't write that because someone was holding a knife to my throat! I swear! Ouch, those teeth of yours are awfully sharp you know, Ceberus.)

Blue Yeti

Darn you! This makes all of my fanfics look like trash! Anyways the description was fantastic. I would write a longer review but I have to go feed my kitten.

~Yukina~

hey letting you know writting a new story it will be posted soon i'll give more details later and please update killer instinct as soon as possible thanks a lot

flamhead1

up date up date up date up date up date ples ples ples ples ples ples

Oh the napalm definately. Some ppl might consider that needlessly harsh but I think it's their just deserts. That was a very cute bio. I loved it to no end. It doesn't take the cake as the most random but it's the funniest, most real and one filled with the largest amounts of not so subtle messagesa nd hints towards 13 and 14 yr old writers everywhere. IT's bloody shameful isn't it. I could write a better MS than that when I was 12.

I don't make sense do I? I didn't think I would since it's quarter to one but anyhoo...

Blue Yeti

i say, this must be one of the best AF fics here, apart from some of blue yeti's stuff.
this is really good! i appreciate the fact that you've bothered to include so much factual information, and the way you display your sizeable vocabulary is impressive. much of what i wanted to say has already been said by blue yeti, so i'd just like to add that you're a real breath of fresh air in this stuffy closet of AF fandom. well done, and keep writing.

you're a really descriptive writer and all...but...uh...your chapters lack artemis...he IS in the story...rite? i would hope so..i remember reading about him in other chapters so why isn't he in this one? perhaps i missed something...but i really would like to see the main character in this story a bit more often...

still...u sure are a LOT more descriptive than me when you write..nice name

hey

I love ur story, i just read the 5 chapters, you're a great writer!

Sorry if this reveiw sux but i can't think of anything to help you on, it's too good, you have nothing to fix!

Anyway i'm dying to find out what happens and i just thought i'd let you know how great your story is!

Later

Thank goodness for this also known as some intelligence in AF. I've just come of the *worst* fic at AF (I gave my first true flame to it) and so if I sound more uselessly praising than usual it's because of that and the fact that my expectations are so shot a BAD (you know - badly executed, strange ship, bad concept ect.) fic could push them up to praise levels.

I love this stuff - not for the gore factor (which is sutibly comforting) but for your professonalism and your language. 'arterial', 'extreme intoxication', or even 'prestigious' and 'notorious' (spelt correctly) is a rarity here. And a Latin quote... what were you thinking? That the readers are intelligent? And thinking that they would be interested in puting together hints and plot development... And that they would be interested in subtlety and a polo match. They want Kateri Juana VonVanWitler with all her intelligent, yet cliched trimmings! I'm sceptical of the fandom right now if you can't tell.

I loved thsi chapter as I did the last four, it's juicy, different and detailed. You pay attention to all the little things and I'm sure you've included little things which I have missed but will treasure when I reread and spot it. Delightful.

I actually think that it is a compliment that you don't have many reviews. Yes, I am off my rocker but listen. The ones that have heaps of reviews are the ones that are either oldies, or appeal to the simple mind. They have reviewers who kick on the post button multible times to raise the count. And write things like 'RITE MORE!!! LUV THIS LOADS!!!!!!!!!!!' with exclaimation marks that cause the reader to scroll over the bar to read anything else. The fcat that most AFians can't understand your style and writing is a compliment because taht means your style and writing is different from the norm. I don't know whether I'm justifying this to myself or to you...

Well, anyway. I think this is the best story on AF.

Blue Yeti

Ow, ow I found a mistake!! You wrote 'and' instead of 'an' in "Gregorieva – though he was and excellent broker". And that's my critical contribution. I definately like the fact that you've been hitting the thersaurus and the logic centers or your brain and the real world information... You get the point. I like the details and higher level of quality in this fic than what you find in most other AF fics and I love how you've used a new idea and characterisation which is much more realistic to the canon. Details like the side-of-hand scan is just, pure genius. It makes this a much better story to read. I like very very much and shall now place on my favourite stories in the slim chance that anyone at AF has learned how to surf those.

Blue Yeti