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| Beth5572 2008-06-22 ch 14, | abuseI would love to see what you write next. Your a great writer and your stories are great too. Thank you, Terri |
| shiftyless 2008-05-25 ch 14, | abuseVery awesome |
| dimriver 2008-04-30 ch 14, | abuseGood story. Will now read book 2. |
| dimriver 2008-04-21 ch 4, | abuseIn the American version it is Potter, Harry. |
| PadfootRidesAgain 2008-04-12 ch 3, | abuseHate to burst ur bubble and all but heres a direct quote from the book Malfoy swaggered forward when his name was called and got his wish at once: the hat had barely touched his head when it screamed, "SLYTHERIN!" Malfoy went to join his friends Crabbe and Goyle, looking pleased with himself. There weren't many people left now. "Moon" "Nott" "Parkinson" then a pair of twin girls, "Patil" and "Patil" then "Perks, Sally-Anne" and then, at last -- "Potter, Harry!" So check ur facts before spouting crap. Besides, u got a long way to go to reach her level. |
| n 2008-04-09 ch 2, anon. | abuseonce again pretty good. Small thing once again last chapter you said Blaise's hair was black dark red, here you said it was brown... may want to change one of them, or draw more attention to the fact that there was a change if meant for it to so it doesn't look like a plot hole. |
| n 2008-04-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseJust found this story, pretty good so far, one minor error though you called Smelting as college... problem is that eleven year olds do not go to college, I think that it was called a boarding school in the book. keep up the good work |
| Warrior Priestess 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abusenods. I like it. I shall see if there's a sequel. |
| Draeconin 2008-02-05 ch 1, | abuse"Gonna"? "Yup"? "Nope"? Just where is this story taking place? Nebraska, USA? The story might be okay, but the English is atrocious! The lower classes in Britain might use 'yeah', but proper English? Almost never. (Mind you, there are a lot of dialects, but one would need to research each in order to do them justice. However, what you've used here are Americanisms.) To take a sentence at random: āIām gonna be eleven soon!ā In proper English Harry might say "I'll be eleven, soon!" or "I'm eleven, in a few days!" (Or whenever.) One also needs to remember that proper British behaviour is a bit reserved, and although Dudley might not have been instructed well in proper manners, the Dursleys would have made sure that Harry knew them, if only because they would have used his lack of manners to insult and denigrate him. One last thing for this chapter (and I won't be reading further): I do NOT believe any adult would allow Dumbledore to dictate their actions. They *might* listen to requests, but that's about the end of it. |
| keeperofthedragons 2008-01-13 ch 14, | abuse*crows!* its about time that someone made those houses tie! i think it was the most fitting ending, and i will be seeking out more of your work. |
| keeperofthedragons 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abusewell, i'm only just starting to read your story, but honestly, the only thing i can say if you're working from a french version and having to translate, is, I'M IMPRESSED! fantastic work. its bad enough for americans to understand the quirks of british english. for you to manage to deal w/ french to british is simply amazing. it also implies at least, that english isn't your first language. if this is true, double compliments. cuz, if you hadn't mentioned it, i certainly wouldn't have known. great plot, and i'm eager to read more! |
| Wassermagierin 2007-12-16 ch 4, | abuseI've read the first few chapters, and I'm sure that I wouldn't be able to stop! I love it, I'll continue reading right away! |
| Ranger Dragen 2007-10-31 ch 9, | abuseGreat chapter, what did the a*s Higgs do to Harry? |
| Ranger Dragen 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseWhat a great start; I like Harry meeting the Zabinis's |
| Nostalgic Beauty 2007-10-09 ch 1, | abuseI thought that Blaise was a boy. Oh well. |